I’d be surprised if there wasn’t a lot of pushback about making a school designed like THAT prison (though calling it a prison is a huge understatement).

I tried. I really did. After the very promising, albeit strange prologue, I wanted to see how much it would make me excited for another chapter. But after the first 2 chapters after the prologue, it went downhill.

It went from "Not bad." to "Goddamn dialogue only texts!" to "Not bad again, but bad grammar and too much use of brackets." then it went back to "Goddamn adding in random characters from random sources to fill in the empty background character spaces!" to "Bad grammar with too much brackets again." to finally "Idk what I'm reading anymore..."

Sorry if this offended you and I know you also understand how bad it is despite trying to make it intersting, but unfortunately for you and me, I don't like the story and you don't get another follow and/or favourite.

the prologue was good, then it became weaboo OC shit

OK, THAT is funny. Really?

That gives "mouth to mouth resuscitation" a whole 'nother meaning.

As intresting as this story is, its just too all over the place to even make sense...

One reason I don't like reading about Touhou is how the fanbase always make them characters as overpowered as they want. Apparently the claim of Touhou powers not governed by logic is always interpreted by fans as a license to make their favorite Gensokyo characters steamroll the oppositions. Heck, if a fan chose to, a single miko can even go up against Emperor's Death Star plus an armada of Siths single-handedly and still win without a scratch...

That said, I'm not sure where your story is going, since it's rather random, with character-insert from random series popping up and whatnot. Usually I read crossover only when I'm familiar with both series, so when characters from random shows drop in without any exposition, it gets confusing fast.

*facefault*

I was so engrossed with the story of how they could defeat the kaijin and thinking that our favorite armpit-miko will save them then you actually put a Kamen Rider out of nowhere!?

0_0

*face palm*

I will wait for the next chapter.

do your best!

*thumbs up*

Ahhh where is Reimu with her rediculously broken skills of powah?!
Go, go Reimu-chan!
Fighto!
Steamroll all your opponents and bring them to their knees with you amazing 1337 pro skillz!
Mwahahahahahaha!
Good chapter, keep up the good work!
-Reader-of-Many-

you really need a beta this time...
it's too much painful to read this fic sometimes you know...
and please importing more characters from other series please.

Also, Mami's guns weren't actually shotgun or anything you know. It's just a freaking musket rifles (you know medieval to post-medieval times rifles).

Lastly, sometimes I really can't follow the storyline you know.
an example of this chapter is when after Reimu and co. went to school it immediately followed by an attack to Mami? I know it's been few hours since their meeting but the follow up is just so random.

I don't get this chapter...

huh? if you're saying that the Tome of Darkness can't do an apocalyptic terror then you're wrong there my friend. It did destroyed many worlds in Nanoha canon before it killed Chrono's father and finally held by Hayate.

hmmm... interesting... but Reimu fighting off against Wolkenritter that is something I really want to see... btw, I'm pretty sure Reimu can defeat Homura, after all, Sakuya's a time master as well...

Mmmmm, interesting I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

Okay, putting aside grammar Nazi, we got a plot hole to patch up...

Wait, what? Reimu can identify that Homura is "abnormal" the moment they met, yet she can't sense what's wrong with one of her friend? (I mean Mami of course, unless you planned to say that in this timeline she's not Magical Girl that is. or something else that's plausible and not stretch suspension of disbelief too much.

And truth to be told, each chapter is too short for my taste.

That's all i can told for now, waiting for the next...

Short, but works for a prologue. If you continue this, I hope that the following chapters are longer. On the premise, I find that it is good and unique. What I like about it the most is that is is truly believable for the settings, and not a cop out like 'Yukari transported me to a different world.'

At this point, your characterization is close to the source and not like the various fandom interpretations, though it is to early to see if it stays like this.

Concluding, I hope you update, there are not enough good Touhou crossovers.