Dawww... this is soo cute! Good writing!

HAHA lol this is such a cheasy love story but it's still awesome! Keep writing!

Don't worry people! New editor to the rescue! I'll fix this right away!

seriously, you need someone to check your spelling mistake and also grammar and vocab error. You made a lot in there...

I don't want to be mean but hey, no one is perfect... I'm impressed that you can still write the story even thought you made a lot of mistake... The story is nice but i still think you need someone to check your work... It will be a very nice story after you or someone fix the spelling,grammar and vocab mistake...

Please, PLEASE get a beta. Or at least be more careful editing. There's a lot of spelling errors, and you need to remember to use punctuation marks, especially commas. Also, you may want to revise the structure of your story, take time to include details explaining why characters do things, and work on making the dialog less awkward. I'm not trying to be mean, and I'm certainly not perfect myself, but reviewing is for honest feedback to help other authors improve. I really like the premise of this story, but the execution seems a bit juvenille as it stands now. I hope you continue this idea and consider my advice. Again, sorry if I hurt your feelings, I'm just trying to help.