Wow.
This was cool.
Have some cookies. And some awesomesauce, though they won't go good together.

Yeah this is true. Im sad though that Allen will die either way though. :( if possible i hope he survives!

Love it!
I'm a -Man follower and this really stuck to me
Don't want Allen to die tho!

EPICNESSS! Siriusly man, Finnicking epic. Super awesome-ly epic. That is all I have to say. ;)

I'm so excited that you put another story up! It's too bad that I've never actually read/watched D-gray man... But I have heard that it's interesting, so maybe I'll get into it! :)

I don't know if the characters were in character or OOC, so I can't give you any criticism there...

I didn't see any grammar mistakes, which is good. I'm pretty sure most people don't like reading stories riddled with grammatical errors. :)

The only thing I didn't like was the summary. Because when I first looked at it, it seemed like you were spoiling the story by saying he was going to die DURING the fanfic. But I'm sure more avid readers/watchers of D-gray man would understand the whole thing more than me, so whatever! XD

Wait! There was one more thing that I didn't like. The length. Well, I guess it's not that I didn't like it, I just wish it was a little longer. So like, 600 words. But I guess I'm just being nit-picky. .'

Overall though, good story! (Even though I didn't really understand the whole situation...) Can't wait for your next one!

-AverageApple