Naruto King of the retard

Pick a damn path for the story holy shit. It’s swapped way to many times. I’m lost as fuck this story is honestly way to confusing to want to read

I can say one thing for certain: This fics has the greatest bashing scenes. 11/10, would laugh again.

More seriously, the demonizing of Konoha and Minato is so over the top its unintentionally funny. This isn't depressing or horrifying, its farcical. If you wanted to write scenes where poor Naruto is trotted upon again and again, it should be done manner in a manner that's believable (ie, realistic). First thing is exposing Minato being killed off and replaced with his evil twin, since his behavior is so far OOC it provokes unintentional hilarity.

You can just imagine him running through the Book on all things Evil, cackling to himself as he comes up with more torturous and creative ways to make Naruto miserable, while the "Ever despicable and most certainly Evil(!) Civilian Council" is starting to wonder if they should tell the guy chill out already. Torturing Naruto's all well and good, for what else would they do with their time, but this guy extracts just a wee bit too much pleasure from it . . .

God this is cring

Anyone else find it dumb and cringy that the story is written like his name is actually monster.

You're trying to make a dark story but the passing and fluidity just feel devoid of any sense and the impact of actions and occurrences are just thrown in insanity causing them to loose what they're ment to do, cause an impact, the story keeps one attention but loses it quickly in itself due to the somewhat lose of character and self identified darkness that lost its meaning.

I wanna start this review with stating the one good thing. The story had a lot of potential. I like the premise, but that's about it.

This biggest problem with this fic is your writing. It's actually OK. It's the way you worded things, which was terrible and frustrating to read. You have a bad habit of confusing phrasing, like "the teach of Naruto" instead of simply "Naruto's teacher". I wish you had gotten a better beta before finishing the story.

Aww... would have lived to have a naruto yugito thing going.

Dude, you're a twisted person. I almost quit reading after this chapter.

Great job

This was the longest, anger inducing, unsatisfying, worst story I ever read

You do know that in the first chapter that had kyuu-chan in it you put she and then in every other chapter it has a he?

Wow

this is too much of a clusterfuck

To the guy beneath me:
There is a civillian council. They manage the food and water as well as resources for the inhabitants of the village. This is why they have power over the ninjas. Check your facts before insulting someone and their fic.