Love what you did with the story!

haha very nice

Blood Zephyr It was my first attempt in writing for a crossover with LA and Hawaii 5-0. I tried my best and clearly you can't respect it with your rude comment. I will be praying for your heart to be more understanding on people's writing! God Bless!

...I'm not even sure what this was... certainly not something that should have been posted...

this is...um...well, weird. it's not really a normal conversation and not at all in character for either sam or steve. i would suggest really paying attention to how each character speaks, acts, etc. on the show and then basing your dialogue off of that, otherwise, this could be anyone from any show having a weird, stilted conversation.

Interesting