I know its been a while but I would like to see the rest of this story work out. Especially the whole telling the Sheriff of the supernatural and that Stiles and Derek are together

Love your fic! Complaints about grammar, typos etc. come from dweebs with no vision!

Wow love the story damn now the Sheriff finds out but the story good please write more

Wow. Nice cliffhanger. Love this story so far. Hope you find time to update and/or finish this story soon, can't wait to see how this plays out.

Thank you for sharing your story here.
~WickLobo

interesting

Great story, I like how the story is going so far. ...update soon

... Still even and slow, clam (calm)...
... Release a sigh. Derek regret(Ed)...
... Back against him. He has (had)...
... Dereks (Derek's) whisper was load (loud)...
... The awkward sort of load (loud)...
... Move up so that they where (were)...
... Stiles closer and his (kiss) him...
... Hoping his feelings got thru (through)...
... Stiles, don;t (don't) you have school...
... Minutes?" Derek of coarse (course)...

I really like your turn or phrase, here: "a question with a bit of awww in his voice." Usually, one would write 'awe;' however, using the similar-sounding 'awww' puts a totally different emotion in the scene! Very awwwsome ;-)

Gramercy,
Miss L Anyus

P.S.: Sorry, I'm too lazy to sign in, today. My username is the same: Miss L Anyus (pronounced 'miscellaneous').

... All sorts of very inappropriate very load (loud) noises but his brains (brain's)...
... Down Derek Hales (Hale's) throat...
... So he could pull Stiles (Stiles') boxers back up and remove the boys (boy's) jeans completely. Derek ten (then) kissed...
... His jeans and it wasn't fare (fair) for Stiles...
... A mind blowing (mind-blowing) organism (orgasm)...
... Asked in his most tiers (tired)...
... Occasionally the hang (hand) job...
... Stroked Derek threw (through)...

I noticed that you didn't use possessive apostrophes anywhere in this chapter. Using An Apostrophe To Show Possession (from .ca . )
An apostrophe plus "s" is used to form the possessive case of all singular nouns, including those ending in "s," e.g.: Rachel's car, the cat's pyjamas, Alice's restaurant, Chris's plants and the fox's tail. Also, plural nouns which do not end in "s" e.g. The People's Court.
An apostrophe alone is used to form the possessive case of plural nouns ending in "s," e.g. the Smiths' house and the foxes' tails; and, singular nouns that would sound awkward with another "s" added, e.g. Ulysses' adventures and Borges' novels.

Just so you know, my 'inner editor' automatically replaces all errors when I'm reading - so they don't get in the way of my enjoyment of your story!

Gramercy,
Miss L Anyus

"...as he let Stiles proses (process)... He was therfor (therefore) rather shocked..."
I'm pretty deep into your story; it's just that typos and homophones annoy me. You can try 'reading' your chapters backwards, sentence by sentence, to proof for such errors without getting sucked into plot.

I have to go back after each chapter and read your "lines" - they're hilarious!

Gramercy,
Miss L Anyus

I loved it please update more

Lawl(lol)!
So awesome!

i really frickin love your lines theyre soo hilarious

P.S. i like the story too its really good

Update the story.!

your line breaks are absolutly funny cant stop laughing and i love this story too.

Hurry an Update, need sumore! XD