Just please write more, I really got into your story, it's so well written and complex and captivating. Please, have mercy on my soul.

Wow! This is really good! This is so much like what I think being infested would be like, you know? This story captured it best. You made my morning, thanks for writing!

The little clandestine conversation was very well-done, and it stands to reason that in the chaos of the pier they'd be hard to hear. I also liked Dean's gripe about the Yeerk knowing everything he knows.

Yeah, I was too lazy to log in.
Anyway, thanks for updating. Nice chapter, and thank you for addressing my questions. I agree, the Yeerks never seem to get past that one random town (fun fact: until recently I thought the Animorphs lived California as well, but now I think it was in Oregon, which is just north of California. The reason for this is because of the fact that there were no wolves in Calfornia in the 1990s.)
Just out of curiosity, how old is Dean? He seem at least fifteen or so, but he can't be older than eighteen.
Update soon,
The QAS

For the thought-speak symbols, I always copy them from the Wikipedia page on guillemets. I don't know how to find them in Microsoft Word.

The slang doesn't bother me. :D But I appreciate your explanation that this is not in the same location as the Animorphs.

"It wasn't a greeting; it was just an acknowledgement of familiarity. Ah, yes, you. I know you." - I think this was the best part of this chapter. It very poignantly sums up the relationship between yeerk and host. (Now you've got me un-capitalising it!)

Thanks for the new chapter!

Yay annoying songs! The bane of human-Controllers everywhere ... and the people who have to work with them.

I'm following both of your stories :)

aaaaaww.. the yeerk is so cute! I love the cute little conversations betweeen the yeerk and his cute little yeerk buddies. So kawaii desu!

Dean is a really fun point-of-view character. He feels like a real kid, and I can totally sympathize with him. It's also interesting to see how the Yeerks train up newly hosted Yeerks.

Just a small criticism - I noticed a lot of "Britishisms" in this fic that don't seem natural coming from an American kid. Maybe find an American beta who can point them out?

I hope you find the time to update this.

Very interesting. I'm looking forward to reading the next part. Love the ending-Dean's Yeerk probably would go nuts if he had to hear that song over and over.

This is very realistic. Particularly well done is Dean's gradual realisation that even his mother doesn't notice he's become a Controller. Is this set in Canada? I'm not sure if Canadians say "Mom" or "Mum", but Britain seems too far away for the Yeerks to have reached as yet.

Haha, love the chapter ending. Btw, how did you manage to make the thought speak symbols? Fanfiction usually just deletes mine.
Update soon!
The QAS

Sorry about that, my review was cut off when I accidentally hit the button to forward it. Anyway, as I stated, I don't really care that you write realize as realize, but if you want to make your writing more realistic, you can try to use American terms in the dialogue. For the most part ther was no problem, the only other slip up I saw other that "mum" was at the very beginning when you use that word "rubbish". While it may be common slang for everyone else, for some reason no one in the US would be caught dead using the word (except for me, but that might just be because I read a lot of Harry Potter.) other than that, you're good to go. The story has a very strong beginning and well written dialogue. It gives good insight to the world of a human controller that is rarely seen or even acknowledged in the series. The second chapter was as good as the first, keep up the great work!
The QAS

I'll be honest, normally I'm not crazy about these kinds of stories with OCs becoming controllers and all. I'm glad to say that I was pleasantly surprised with this first chapter. Dean is a realistic, well-developed character and so is the Yeerk.
Still, there are a few points I would like to make, nothing major, but you might want to know.
The Animorphs series takes place in the United States. (The Yeerks never seemed to really get past that one little town.) Based off of your spelling, I'm going to assume that you are from some other English-speaking country, like the UK. As you are probably well aware, us Americans have weird spellings for things for no apparent reason. You seem to disregard this in your writing (ex: using the term "mum" instead of "mom".) this by itself doesn't bother me too much, but you will probably recieve complaints about your spelling from ignorant people who don't realize that most English speakers spell realize "realise". L

You're doing an outstanding job with this. :) Firstly, how are you getting the regular thought-speech brackets to work?! I'm so jealous!

Secondly, I have to say, for all the human-Controller stories I've read, none of them have ever gone into this much detail over what those very first few days would be like, and I'm really enjoying that perspective on things. Your use of Dean's ignorance and the way things are being incidentally revealed around him is, for me, building up a lot of anticipation for the moment when he finds out that this yeerk has to actually /leave/ him every three days. :) It's also kinda neat to see a Yeerk that's, well, not so good at being a Yeerk yet. :) I hope we get to see Desca's learning curve as well, and see how he grows to establish the kind of control most yeerks have over their hosts.