Hoping for more!

I just love HisoKura. u Hisoka x Kurapika forever! :B

I don't really know what to say... It's weird, but I like it, I guess...

What did you compose this in? Notepad? LibreOffice is a free open-source editing software if you can't use Word. It's not quite as fancy, but it won't force you to use Enter for word-wrapping, and it has spellcheck, too (not that you need it).

"I want Kura-chan paired with Leorio, Killua, Hisoka, and Senritsu!"

All of them at once?

Actually, that would be totally HOT. And eyes scarlet with desire... no one else will write it, I better get moving.

eeeeeee i loooooove kurapika awesome story i simply adore jealousy
its really cute :D

I LUV IT XDD

this is awesome ! XD

can you make another hisokura fic ?

plz..

Hey! I love it!

But can you please write a new hisokura fic?

With sweetness .. and Love..

Yeah .. a fic were they're just an ordinary couple !

Fighting for their love?

Could you?could you?

I really like their pairings!

woshho

gosh,gosh,gosh!...

this is terribly amazing!..

kura x hiso is almost impossible to cross my mind

congrats, anyway

8's a great fic

write more!

TC always :-)gyo

wow, this fic was written 6 years ago so its a little late to comment but I just want to say I really enjoyed it. :)The plot was interesting and amusing. I liked your simple and clean writing style and formatting of the paragraphs. I hope you write more when you have time, its obvious you're very talented!

I read the comment beneath mine that mentioned you could deepen the scenes by adding more description. I agree because it would help the readers understand the mood you want to convey. It might be a side-effect of not choosing a single POV character. I think if you showed what happened from the POV of only Kurapika this story could be more touching. That's why the Leorio fic worked better in this regard, since I can empathize with him better. ( But the plot in this one is more...exciting,lol ) Thanx for the fic and I hope you write more!

The whole concept is excellent and you wrote some really good dialogues that are meaningful and represent the characters. I see your attempt to use Bashou and Skuwala to narrate the relationship between Hisoka and Kurapika, which is a nice method, making the story interesting. I like the way you see the relationship between the them, and, the 'wall of Kurapika's photographs and posters'-thing. Also, the one-sided romance of Senritsu is quite sweet and the proportion of this in the story is just right.

However, there are still things you need to improve in this fanfic. I hope you don't mind if I'm being too stern - your writing ability (like, to describe an event, the emotion and thoughts of characters) is, in fact, so-so. That's why you relied so much on the conversation, which is in my opinion, obviously over-used.

In short, the concept is nice but not really nicely done. You have great potential and I expect more great works from you (esp. on this couple)!

It creeped me out imagining Kurapika acting like that around his co-workers [erm, hugging them? Talking with them like they were friends?]. He’s really OOC, but this whole fiction was a nice concept. I enjoyed reading it as much as i did your other fic. And the idea of Hisoka taking pictures of Kurapika, haha! That got me smiling like an idiot, everybody thought i was reading some porn [well...i was, in a way xp]. Actually, the only one who didn’t seem out of character in this fiction is Hisoka. I can just see him saying and doing all the things he said and did in this fic, that big pervert! *lol* [i thought he was infatuated with gon, though? Nyahaha!]

I like this fic. Oh, anybody can get out-of-character once in a while. And like you said, this is just for amusement after all, ne.

- i loved this it was great and funny too. but i like the ending best :) his smile really is sexy.

Oh...O.O It made me shiver...Can't picture Kurapika letting HIsoka to have his own way around him...but then a great fic, not to mention the first KuraHiso fic I've read...Oh...I need some blankets...*shivers*

i like it when the story . continue

please