Oh Por Dios! Simplemente no puedes dejar esto así, yo se que ya pasaron algunos años desde la última actuazliación... pero te ruego que no la abandones, es demasiado genial! :'v

I really love your story, but i see you have stoped updating it. Can you please continue making chapters in your story? I seriously think this is one of the best BRS stories i've found! :-)

i know this story is on what is most likely indefinite hiatus, and that you should be considered MIA, i will review this anyway to help you if you do happen to come back onto FF and start writing
again.

where to start? oh yes! the things you have done right, the characters are well, in character they are well flushed out, and even though there is little to no plot at all you can't deny that it is rather cute the dialogue is alright of course even though there is some minor issues with it... now onto the constructive criticism.

it's alright but without much of a plot it is, of course almost pure fluff although i do see the makings of a conflict brewing with Saya and Mato right now within the story it is rather passive, i could see Yuu becoming a big problem later on and under the pretense that Mato's friends find out that well, Mato IS crushing on BRS would not just break yomi's heart but with Mato's possible excuse that BRS would be her cousin if she were to ever come into Mato's world would be a HUGE problem as it would be considered taboo.

the story it's self at the moment doesn't have much of a plot although if you were to put more time expanding upon these simple concepts, the plot will start to thicken with Mato keeping her feelings under wraps while at the same time beating Saya off her ideas with a metaphorical stick, this will probably cause Mato to become a little stressed catching the attention of Black rock shooter herself which would cause BRS wanting to pry Mato off of her for Mato's sake ESPECIALLY when she finds out exactly what would happen with Mato's friends if they should she find out that Mato has a crush on her and what exactly what the consequences be if they should find out, and then there's the whole emotion problem with BRS.

all in all the plot has a lot of potential, in fact this story it's self has a lot of potential, now you must remember that for this to work the character development, and the plot, and dialogue, must be exceptional, that means do not rush and think things through and you should be ok, those of us who have favorites and follows shell patiently await your return in hopes that you either make another good story or choose to continue or remake this one

Good story please continue with it.

I like it, but a quick word of advice- I learned that when writing action scenes, the sentences are supposed to be short and fast paced. It seems like your trying to cram too much information into one sentence. Of course I'm not the pro, just take my word with a grain of sand.
Are you still doing this story? I was genuinely interested. :( keep up the good work

Cute! It's too bad the story went on hiatus.

Interesting!
So Yomi was going to see Saya about something important, but bailed when she realized Mato was going to see Saya as well. Shortly after Mato arrives at Otherworld just in time to see BRS fighting none other than Dead Master! Coincidence? Doubt it.
Good work with the characters and scenes. They feel true to the series. And that helps make the relationships even sweeter!

For some unknown reason I find this story idea really appealing!
Let's see how it develops!

I wish to read more

its been too long, please update soon, im dying with anticipation

Lik it, pl update

I REALLLY LOVE THIS STORY! IM BEGGING U PLEEEEAAAASEEE WRITE MOOOORRREE PWEASSSSEEEE

Please update soon! I want to see if everything works out in the end.

Interesting looking forward to chapter 4

Please continue! I love this story!