dude where exactly do you think new york city is. niagra falls are not in new york city

I love ur story bt wat abt the part wen they feel tht smthng is weird

Umm i don't think you call a woman's private part a 'crotch' that's just for males and even if it's used for both genders for females it's awks asf...

Correction: Niagara Falls is in Buffalo, not near Buffalo.
And also, I am shocked that only one other reviewer noticed this mistake and cared enough to review about it. Because honestly, this isn't just some sort of grammatical mistake like not putting a comma inside the quotations after dialogue, or a small typo issue, but a consistently annoying geographical mistake.
It was a huge turn off for this story.
I can more or less deal with grammar (unless it's complete utter shit).
But I can't deal with this kind of thing.
Please at least bother to do some research before writing this.

Hey, great story, but I just wanted to tell you that Niagara Falls isn't in New York City. The Falls are in New York STATE, but pretty far from NYC. I live in New York City, and have been to Niagara a few times already, so this kind of bothered me when I read it. It takes a couple of hours by car (half a day, I'd say, including gas stops and lunch and such) to get from NYC to Buffalo (the city near Niagara) and I was hoping to see the four strawhats go on a road trip there.
I'm sorry if this annoyed you, but I had to tell you this because the slip up quite irritated me as a New Yorker :)

Luffy doesnt get bloody noses,but awesome STORY

... Am I the only one screaming that Niagra Falls is in buffalo NOT New York City... Of which is on completly the otherside of New York, you even mentioned Canada... New York City isn't near Canada's like buffalo with the Great Lakes... Sorry I I may sound rude but I am from buffalo and you're sense of direction is near levels with zoro

man bleach shouldve been #1

Yyyyaaaaayyyy ZoRo!

SU-GEEEEEEE? Thats Not Even A Word.

Very cute story and I knew as soon as Luffy heard a wierd noise what was going on next door with Zoro and Robin xD

KYAAA! XD IT'S SO KAWAIII!

Is this complete already? Nooo ): But I enjoyed it much, thank you for writing this (:

I like this idea! Good job!

Boringgggggggggg