I really liked the way you used the letter throughout the story to show the development of B&E's relationship. Also enjoyed the Seth subplot and his friendship with Bella.

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this was fantastic! i really loved it :) i loved how the prsent day was intercut with the letter she wrote to edward. and her telling off jake was great, especially when she went all dramatic on us and yanked the necklace off! how badly do i want more? BADLY hahaha

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Awww... sweet! I really liked how you worked the letter into the story. Highlighted just how special E/B's relationship was.

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I really enjoyed your style here. Placing parts of the letter throughout what was going on in the story.

So glad that B got out before she became a stepford wife.

Thanks for writing.

Oooh! Beautiful! I absolutely loved Bella's story written on top of Seth's story. That was sooo good. Thanks and good luck! :)

"I'd rather fight with you than make love to anyone else." - love that.

The letter woven throughout gave this a very nice touch.

Congrats on your very first o/s. :) And good luck in the contest!

I really liked the letter being interspersed with the action to show the basis of E/B's relationship, and also how it all tied together at the end. Glad she finally took control of her life :)

wow, this is really good, i loved it

Thanks for writing! :) Good luck in the contest.

Great story, thank you for sharing it!