Oh, my-it's subtle here, but I'm guessing Skinny Boy, aka Bug, is actually Scorpius, and no, let's not tell Daddy, shall we? Or Harry, either.

I enjoyed this fic, really it showed the worries and fears of mother. It seemed you did a very good job in detail with first person. You did a good job telling Hermione's feelings throughout the story. There is one mistake I did notice though, the 'I' in i'm isn't supposed to be capitalized. I noticed that throughout the story. I think it is quite amusing to see Hermione's reaction too, I like how you kept her in character and included a little about the past. There is also the word 'Zat'. I think you meant that, unless you were referring to the way the character says 'that, otherwise it is seemingly original.

Hermione would be an uptight, hovering mother. It's slightly ironic though because her parents never really had the chance to after she began at Hogwarts. Imagine the Grangers' sleepless nights.
It's funny that she couldn't find anyone to share her concern, not even Ron. Of course that would change drastically if he knew who the hot boy was.
I like Hermione's last line on that.
Nice to make Fleur a part of that. She's already raised a daughter past that stage so is speaking from experience.
["That wasn't horrible. They looked good!" Nine years old and she used the...]- Was this whole paragraph part of the dialogue or was some narration? If it was dialogue then the quote mark is misplaced.
Creative parenting in giving Hugo an outdoor project to allow Hermione time alone with Rose to learn about her new friend. What a mother
can't learn over a plate of cookies...
I really like the description of Rose's excitement and fluster in the park. It's adorable.

I was never much of a fan of Harry Potter but I’m very familiar with the fandom and I do occasionally get drawn into a good HP fanfic with an interesting summary or premise. I have to say I really enjoyed reading this; it’s very light-hearted and sweet. It reflected all of the worries of a mom even if they are small worries and I ended up thinking about what I’ll have to deal with when I have my own kids. Granted they won’t be witches or warlocks, at least I don’t think they’ll be, but I hope I’ll have that friend to go to when I’m feeling a bit lost.

Speaking of Hermione’s go-to friend, Ginny. I did feel like Hermione was overreacting a bit (I know that this was done on purpose by you so don’t worry I’m not pointing this out as a bad thing) so Ginny having a bit of a giggle fit over it all was very believable. I know that you probably shouldn’t laugh when someone is really worried over something but honestly I would have laughed a bit to. I mean again, I don’t have kids but still.

Another notable and well-written moment was Hermione actually going back to her daughter and innocently asking a few questions about the boy Rosie thought was ‘hot’. I liked that she was taking her friend’s advice. Yes, I was expecting her to but I wasn't prepared for it to go so smoothly. Then you move onto the park and all of Hermione’s thoughts about the boy in question, about Rosie’s possible first heartbreak, just so many worries. It’s likely what parents are constantly thinking, what my own mom was thinking in regards to me and my siblings. I just have to laugh and I have absolutely no complaints. You are a lovely writer, much love, I hope I didn’t ramble too much.

I have to say, I really love this premise. It’s probably one of the more unique things I’ve seen in the Harry Potter fandom, largely because of how mundane it is. It’s always nice to see a reminder that even these characters are wizards, they’re still humans and have to deal with human problems too.

As for what I liked specifically, I greatly enjoyed Hermione. I do like seeing know it all characters being put in situations that they are not prepared to handle, and dealing with children is always a good way to do that. It’s nice to see her freaking out like that, because we so rarely saw that in the books. Also, I would hope that she wouldn’t find a 9 year old hot. That’s creepy.

You also handled Ginny quite well. Not as good as Hermione, but she served her role as a mentor character who had all the answers. I liked Hermione bringing up things from the past and Ginny brushing it off, you can hear the echos of the old relationship they had, with Hermione as the older sister Ginny never had.

I do have little issue with Rose, she never really struck me as a 9 year old. She acts a little too flippant to believe that, especially when she rolls her eyes at her mother. She’s more like a 11-12 year old.

Overall, this was a good diversion and I enjoyed it quite a bit. Good job.

Great start with Hermione's thoughts. She just can't wrap her head around the idea that her little girl is starting to grow up. I like Ron's calmness in contrast in their short conversation by the fire. The talk with Ginny is even better. Lots of funny little quotable lines while showing the different parenting styles of both. Both are perfectly in character, to boot, and that makes it even more enjoyable than an author who hasn't done their homework; you obviously have. It also reflects true that Ginny has more kids, therefore she's a little less affected by the small stuff.

I do have a sneaking suspicion just who Rosie's little crush might be...and the appearance of the new kids at the park scene just proves me right. Hahaha. I like that Fleur kept Hermione from potentially spoiling the moment due to Hermione's assumption that things would go down badly. The ending is cute, with the birthday party and the code names and Rosie's intention to make a better drawing of her little sweetheart's secret sign. Major LOL at the end cuz Hermione is right-telling Ron WOULD redefine the word conniption, not to mention all of its synonyms and a few other terms.

Nicely written.

I loved the mother-daughter interaction in this fic!
The fact that it's a family fic was a lovely change from the romances I normally read, and i think you've written this brilliantly.

Hermione's horror at the fact that her nine-year old daughter was displaying an interest in boys was rather hilarious, especially considering how logical she usually is.

[If I react badly, she won't talk to me about other important things in her life and I'll end up with a teenaged drugged up… pregnant…" I tried to think of something worse than that… "… school drop out because her mother is a heartless prude.]
This line was fabulous, and i'm laughing so hard!
It's brilliant to watch Hermione's logical, rational mind go to pieces over something so small, and cause her to exaggerate like this!
And ginny - dear, emotionally charged Ginny - as the calm one here was brilliant!

I really loved the nicknames the three kids gave to each other at the end, and the fact that the boy in question was Scorpius and not Leo Finnegan was hilarious, if only for Hermione's reaction.
[he'd probably fancy it better than 'bug'.]
[Can you imagine him explaining to his parents that his new nickname is 'bug'?]
*snigger*
Ah, poor Scor, he has no idea what he's in for, does he?

I do have to point out that the ending was just the slightest bot confused.
It was really hard to figure out if it was Leo or Scor Rose had a crush on, and while I'm almost certain it was Scor, I do think you could have made it clearer.

Overall, very well done! :)

Give me a minute. I'm sitting here giggling.

*deep breath* okay, I'm good.

... Okay no I'm not.

Sorry, but that was hilarious. I love you Hermione, you wonderful prudish woman you. It's nice to see the canon get some respectable treatment considering the majority of the fans I hear about. This was cute and funny and very, very enjoyable. The lack of narration and description works in this story's favor, letting us imagine everything instead of absolutely nothing.

It was very cute.

I found this funny and endearingly sweet. Love how Hermione tries to figure out what to do with her daughter. Her conversation with Ginny was fun to read, too. Honestly, when Hermione mentioned setting her up for heartbreak, I couldn't help but wonder if the boy was a Malfoy - I guess after reading too many Dramione fics I've gotten used to it!

Really though, I quite liked reading this. Keep writing!

Good one shot. This was very interesting take on Hermione's personally. I could understand her reactions, since she spent most of her childhood being serious. And of course Rose ends up getting a crush on Scorpius. It would have been nice to see what Ron's reaction would have been, not to mention Draco's. Keep up the good work.

That was very well done. I loved the way Hermione's emotions were written, it really made her sound like a believable mother. The ending was also really satisfying, which I like because sometimes one-shots can seem a bit cropped at the end. Good work!

At first, I thought this story wouldn't be interesting, but towards the end it picked up and proved itself to be actually interesting and provides a lesson in patience and parenting. I didn't see a solid "struggle" in this story so I do have to say it was a little slow at first for me, but it got a bit faster as I continued on reading.

Instead of having a solid conflict that the story revolves around, it seems that the struggle is what is revolving around the story, does that even make sense? That's just the way I see how you weaved the story together.

The whole "hot" bit was amusing, especially how it was being thrown around in Hermione's and Ginny's conversation. And for once, Hermione isn't the one thinking rationally, and that's just a breath of fresh air. You give that spotlight to Ginny, and it was nice to see her insight on the problem.

What I really liked the most about this story is seeing Hermione as a mother, which is different from the usual "heroic Hermione." You kept her in character with her habit of overthinking and worrying almost obsessively over one thing. I can also tell that you seem to have experience with this kind of situation, and you give the reader insight on what a parent thinks when their child grows up.

It makes me wonder on what Ron would think if he ever found out. Actually, it would be interesting to see you do a small series of stories like this that shows the parent's point of view as their daughter grows over the years. I would definitely love to read that.

The only thing I found that was a bit confusing was who Rose's crush was towards the end. It was a bit hard to follow on who she was exactly talking about. Finnigan or Malfoy? I'm pretty sure it is Scorpius, I bet my left arm on that. It was just hard to follow and a bit distracting.

All in all, I do enjoy your work. I must keep an eye out for your stories from now on!

Thank you for the wonderful read!

-The Red Strings-

Awww.

Relationships, and first preadolescent loves, and girl talk... Every fiber of my being screams that there's no conflict, no struggle, nothing at stake. But it works despite that.

The one rule I have in writing- create dire conflict at all times- rendered impotent. There's just a heartwarming little fic about motherhood and kids.

After this, I'll go watch Saving Private Ryan to get my Man Card back, but seriously, this fic was great

I was tensed up, just like Hermione, when Scorpius failed to act like a jerk. For some reason, I cared whether wee Rosie got her heart broken or not. Now, that's just good writing.

I am forced to conclude that there are no good or bad genres- only skilled and unskilled writers. You may confidently place yourself in the former category.

Now, critique:

-Prose wise, the first half of the fic just wasn't working for me 100%. The dialogue between Ginny and Hermione was good, but the asides were a little distracting. If the conversation is just revving up, I don't necessarily want a small paragraph about how and when the Weasleys laugh disrupted the flow. Then, later, you remove the asides altogether, which made me stop and reread a few times to make sure I knew who was talking. Oddly enough, all my complaints about this section were entirely absent from the scene between Rosie and Hermione; that dialogue flowed perfectly.

-The final scene where Rosie and her crush hit it off was a little confusing; I just could not figure out who was who, and who was doing what. I needed to reread it three times before I was confident enough to review. I think you were being a little coy as to names, to keep it a twist at the end that the hot boy was Scorpio. I'm still not positive who Leo is- Seamus's kid? One of the kids who came with Scorpio? Shrug. I would have wanted you to explicitly identify the Finnegan boy, give him a name and so on. Have hermione winder whether it's Sean Finnegan that Rosie's crushing on. THEN have the unnamed skinny blonde kid show up. But hey. Still works.

Great job, pix, adding to favorites.

I go away for a couple months and you've got two new stories! What luck!

I loooooove that this is from Hermione's POV. Your characterization of 'Hermione-as-mother' is great, as well as the Weasleys' constrasting reaction to her anxiety. Hermione's internal monologue at the end of the first section was equal parts funny and believable. Her worries could be those of any mother, save for the bits like "like ingesting Floo powder, getting run over by the Knight Bus or jumping off the Gryffindor tower… on purpose… just to see what happens." Details like that remind the reader that they're in the wizarding world, but a "normal" wizarding world (because at this point, don't we all feel like floo powder and the Knight Bus are normal?)

The ending was perfect and surprising! [I'm glad the pairing wasn't listed as Rose / Scorpius, that would've ruined it.] I'm also grateful that their interaction was age-appropriate. There seem to be so many Rose/Scorpius fics where they fall in love at eleven and are inseparable and their families disapprove but its LOVE blahblahblah. I found this story much more sweet and convincing. And well-written, per usual. I couldn't find any errors!

Great work. :]

This was really enjoyable. Hermione's voice was down to a T and I could really hear everything that was going on. I loved the overprotective mother that we're all familiar with as well as the fact that she puts her own spin on the stereotype. The bits with Ginny were especially enjoyable and I felt like both Hermione and Ginny were especially in character. Ron's inability to provide an answer that satisfied Hermione was excellently done. I loved it. ( :

Thanks so much for this! I really enjoyed this. Good work!

Cheers!