the grammar is off a bit, but it's still good.

this needs updates

8th chapter review:
Well, you certainly shed some light for setsuna's aim.

BUT WHY DID YOU MAKE IT LOOK LIKE YZAK IS A FAR BETTER PILOT THAN ATHRUN!

And yes. Yes for the rewrite. From chapters 1 to 6 or 7 cuz gramar mistakes and exia's nurfing mobility and sword skills.

My first review was supposed to be directed at the 4rth chapter.

Now for my review for the second and third:
The 00 only 'helps setsuna with his quantum brain waves WHILE INSIDE IT to make his innovator mind reading range increase' because APPARENTLY! SPACE IS BIGGER! Also it helps setsuna by feeding the cockpit GN particles inside of it without opening the way to space because setsuna can use the GN particles to communicate better. ALSO YOU FORGOT THAT MU IS IN THE SHIP WITH THE SEED GUNDAM PILOTS! (the intended pilots. Why is everyone forgetting about that information?)

Now for the fifth:
This is spot on. Secrecy... *007 theme plays in the backround*

At the second chapter you did not tell what was setsuna was doing. This is setsuna FROM HIS FINAL SERIES! All of the fodder mobilesuits in his universe is easily at the 3rd generation mobilesuits with exia and the others. WHY DID SETSUNA HAVE A HARD TIME WITH 4 STILL SLOWER BY A HUGE MARGINE GUNDAMS!? Or just Buster... Btw, did you know that setsuna has the same aim as the first lockon that SHOOT AT SOMETHING TO SPACE FROM THE EARTH'S FREAKING SURFACE! EVEN IF YOU TELL ME THAT THEY'RE COORDINATORS IT'S STILL POSSIBLE FOR SETSUNA TO SHOOT DOWN EVERYTHING! You can just make them retreat after duel and buster got "Disarmed" and aegis carrying blitz in mobile armor form and blitz having a dislocated (hanging) claw (hand?)

no this is actually pretty great i love it

Nah... actually, this story is quite good and has a potential, but, I see too much grammar and spelling mistakes.

And also your description (including the word order), and punctuation are... um, bad (no offense! Sorry, but I really felt that way when I read through your chapters...). I suggest you to use the ms. word's spelling check, it'll be a real big help! Nonetheless, I feel that this story is... I don't know. Incomplete? Awkward? I suggest you to go get a beta-reader... it's really a shame if this story falls to the doom of grammar and spelling mistakes... :(

I mean no offense here. Anyway, go get a beta-reader! This story is worth it. :)

the only reason your grammar reads so bad is cause you're writing as if you were a sports commentator, writing in such a way as to sound like you're in a mobile suit of your own telling everyone on the bridge what's going on play by play. Makes for a disjointed and difficult read, but luckily i can correct it in my brain and rad it no problem.

Setsuna is an innovator from another world. and he is GUNDAM!

very good so far

It is indeed short fic yet right to the point where me as the reader "satisfied" with the length.
I read all the chapters in an hour and still feel entertained by this fic.
The fact that it has months without update is upsetting me, hope to have the next chapter.
And, congratz for making Setsuna still true to his innovator Setsuna in canon, I just can't see him with different personalities.

love it continue

Nice chapter. The only thing is that some of the grammar isn't the best, but it's still readable and I can understand it, so it isn't a huge issue. Although I'm only on chapter 3, I look forward to the updates.

update please!

Please continue, I agree that is story has potential. How will Cagalli react to Exia? I wonder how the people of the desert and the Desert Tiger behave towards Setsuna? When will Ribbins Almark makes his' grand entrance? So please concider continuing this story.