Dude, UPDATE IMMEDIATELY. This story was going sooooo well!

Ahhhhh! This is good! I'm looking forward to reading more of this wonderful story!

You should update

Excellent work, would you be interested in using some of my OCs and ideas, keep up the excellent work!

Hey! It's great that someone is actually posting things up in this fandom. The ff fandom is really dead. Ok on to the story.

I like the whole story and all but sometimes it gets confusing who's talking. Im like ok zell is talking and then seifer and then zell. But it gets confusing after they start talking a lot and Im like asking who's talking now and i have to back track a little.

Nothing wrong with the grammar. Nice flow. I like this. Keep it up but i hope you take into consideration my advice. Maybe occasionally putting "Seifer said" but not too much cause Thats just gonna ruin everything too. I guess a nice balance of both? Keep on updating I'll be reading even though i might not review.