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I'm sorry but I think you killed me... I mean, how long did it take you to look up some of those words? How did you NOT pass out from the sheer hilarity of it all? I thought this whole work was precious. And the end actually made me happy. Thanks for the cheering up 'mate' *snickers*. I'll 'bugger off' for now. *dies of laughter*.

The maid outfit! Dying... of... laughter...!

Arthur... a maid... HAHAHAHAHAHA! I laughed so hard when I read that he was wearing a maid's costume!

AHHHH nuuuu I wish it wasn't over! D: And I read it fully.

Awwwwws! I loved this! Especially the different roleplays

Do I detect a Pirate! Iggy sexcapade approaching?

awww! what a cute ending! cant wait forf another! hasta la pasta!

These really are awesome! So well-written and cute and hot. PLEASE keep writing!

nice name for the band! loved it!...i feel dirty rfeading this sometimes haha im such a closet pervet...anyways before i ramble! lovedd the descrpition! update sooooon!

hehe nice family guy refrence in the an ! xD anyways loved this chapie! it was muy bueno and very good wrtting! love this story! cant wait for more! hasta la pasta!

owh! this chappie was hot! great chapterr! hasta la pasta!

This was awesome! Super great job. (man I wish I had more to say but really... it was just really, really good) xP

... I'll admit this was very, very hot.

But on your bio, you say that grammar is the number one most important thing to you, and that it really irritates you when a story has bad grammar. I think you should read over your own work a few times before making a statement like that. You'll find copious grammar and punctuation errors within your story.

Dang, that was hot. xP Really nice job with this!