Technically, November 2nd, 1878 would have been a Saturday, not a Thursday. This is a neat story though; it's a shame you left it off where you did.

Oh I'm really enjoying this! I love the drama, suspense and betrayal throughout this piece! Please please please update?

Intriguing! I wonder how that explanation will go?

I must admit that I do like Erik's manipulative deceptiveness! Erm, in a story, of course, not real life.

Oh, I like this beginning!

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! WHY...WHY COULDN'T THEY JUST HAVE THEIR PICNIC BEFORE IT ALL WENT TO HELL?! SHE JUST HAD TO WRIGHT EVERY LITTLE THING DOWN DIDN'T SHE_! I am kinda dreading the next chapter, but I still want it to come soon. So update PLEASE!

NO what did she do? (this is why I like to start on stories later...I don't have to suffer for weeks on end waiting for the next update!

The way he apologized was just to cute! It was like listening to a three year old saying they were sorry!

I love how you make him talk to himself and argue points:P! Poor Eric he wants her to love him so much and yet she's just so scared!

Wow this is really interesting and It's extremely well written! I can't wait to read more!

Hi,

I thought I'd reviewed this chapter, but apparently I forgot to. So...

Aw, rats. I was hoping the deception would go on quite a lot longer; I was interested to see just how far Erik would let himself go. Oh, well. I did think the way in which Christine found out was good, and sounded plausible.

I love that you included that comment about Erik being a wine connoisseur. It's in the book, but doesn't get put into very many fan fictions. I did, however, find the line about "consulted his taste buds" to be a little odd. I'm not sure that they knew about those in the nineteenth century. But I could also be completely wrong about that.

This story still feels rather rushed. It seems like it needs fleshing out. I come away from it with the impression that it is something of a first draft, albeit a very good one and one with a fascinating and original plot line. But perhaps you are just a more minimalist writer, and there's nothing wrong with that. I personally tend to write and read more wordy stuff, but then that's me, not necessarily you. Again, this is one of the best plot lines I have come across in fanfiction, and I've been reading it for over ten years now, so you definitely get kudos for that. The same plots tend to get recycled over and over even by otherwise good writers, and it's been very refreshing to read this story. I really do like it, and I hope you'll continue. I am still anxious to find out what happens, even if I'd have liked her to find out later.

The Countess of Rothes

Ooh so the truth comes out! Great chapter I can't wait to read more! :)

Oh CRAP! No! I mean, Erik shouldn't have lied to her and all, but at least he should have been afforded a little more happiness, just for a little while. Poor, sweet Christine! I hope Erik makes it all right again! Lovely chapter, as always, dearie! Can't wait for more! (P.S.: I hope you had a good vacation!)

Oh that was so sad! Poor Erik! Poor Christine.

I knew their time together couldn't last forever but it was still just so tragic to read. Maybe a small part of me just hoped they could keep up the pretense indefinitely. So sad.

Hi,

Sorry I haven't reviewed this chapter before this; it's been a busy week. I enjoyed it very much, and am still dying to know what is going to happen to the both of them. I'd love to see some longer chapters. :)

The line "his soul was glut with her voice" I believe should be "glutted." Also, the line immediately after that seemed confusing; first it states that Erik's conscience was continuing to bother him, then that he was oblivious while hearing her sing. Do you mean perhaps that sometimes he was thinking about the fact that he's deceiving her and sometimes he's managing to put it out of his mind?

Again, I just love this plot line and I think it offers some wonderful opportunities for Erik to struggle between being selfish and doing what he knows perfectly well would be the right thing to do. Scenes like that can be wonderfully iluminating of his character. I am looking forward to seeing what you do with the rest of this story.

Enjoy your vacation!

The Countess of Rothes