| Reviews for The Lucky One |
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   avid-reader21 chapter 9 . 5/22/2013 The mistakes in your newest chapter is better not as many but I would recommend getting a beta reader. |
| SasuNarulover49 chapter 9 . 4/24/2013 great story update soon! |
| FireRubyRPG9898 chapter 7 . 4/10/2013 I love your story! |
| Nadja chapter 9 . 4/10/2013 Your grammar improved ;) |
| Angel-Rias chapter 8 . 4/8/2013 Hey, this is a really good story. I would be willing to be your beta if you like. If you agree, I can look over the old chapters and fix them for you. |
| Vannity chapter 7 . 7/23/2012 Atleast you can admit it and try and fix it instead of denying it or flipping out! I wish you good luck and keep writing! |
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/22/2012 It's only chapter one but you are bouncing back and forth way to much between first and third person point of views. |
| Guest chapter 6 . 7/20/2012 I liked this chapter... It made up for the last fake chapter... I wonder what will happen now that Kagome is Alpha what will Inu boy think or do? So much fun... Update soon. |
| Guest chapter 5 . 7/20/2012 Sorry, not quite a flamer but close. I have to ask why do you people who write always do this annoying author notes posted as a chapter... Whats wrong with posting Author Notes at the end of the chapters that way we don't get annoying messages thinking it's an updated chapter when it is not... Please don't take it wrong, I've just gotten tired of authors doing this... When I'm excited to read and find the stupid note... Sucks realy. |
| LifeandFire25 chapter 6 . 7/19/2012 Yay go kagome kick some butt. Can't wait to see what inyuasha will think when sess claims her as his. |
| Vannity chapter 4 . 7/19/2012 "I put my hair up and pull out an enchanted sword she keeps hidden in her back pack. " I noticed how your using the "I" she all wrong.I thought at first you meant it was Sango's sword but in the next sentence you said ' "I" and how it was your sword. You've been doing that alot so it got kind of confusing. |
| Guest chapter 5 . 7/17/2012 very interesting story i cant wait to see what this entire outcome becomes. the whole thing with Inuyasha somehow hiding his aura hmm her power interesting are you going in the rout of her turning into a demon some how? i will wait for your updates :D |
| luckgirl13 chapter 3 . 6/8/2012 good chap. update |
| japanesegirl13 chapter 3 . 6/7/2012 good chapter, look a little rushed because of spelling or typos. update soon |
| Transcendentalist Tangencies chapter 2 . 6/3/2012 Good story and good fix about the P.O.V.'s but when writing in them you need to decide whether to write in third or 1st person. You keep interchanging between the two and the reader is bound to become confused. Other than that, your story is wonderful and heartfelt! (I'm secretly wishing that she finds Inuyasha though). I hope it helps! :D |
