I realy liked this one shot.

This was an interesting read and I enjoyed reading it.

I did get lost though; around half way through it changed from third person to second person. After the transition I began to follow it again, but it was a little confusing, I had to read the last part twice to understand properly because I was trying to work out what had happened and why the transition between the POVs occurred.

But aside from that I enjoyed it. I like the idea, I haven't read anything like that before. :) well done :)