Awkward, but overall amusing.

I died because of otp overload. And that fantastic one line ending.

that was awesome...i like it very much...keep up the good job...!

x0x that was hmm

Before, I skated over your Wallart smut, doubting the existence of "classy" smut. However, I may have changed my opinion - I admire how you didn't lose sight of character anywhere in these 6,000 words. And I guess this kind of tasteful smut is acceptable; everybody has sex, right?

I can't help but melt... My heart... Brain... They just melted through any holes in my body and I don't know what to do! I feel like a jelly... A butter... I don't know what kind of expression people who speak english well intend to use... ;3

My heart is on the pavement and hell yeah I loved their first time wrote by you! *-*

My eyes are sparkling, my heart is skipping a beat, I'm crying and I can't help to think! ;) Sorry about the lame poetry. It just came out... x)

Thanks for the great smut. I was missing some Spitfire Fluffy Sex Fics! _

See Ya.

-Juh

That was great! I can't believe that was your first smut. It was very well written and the situation was realistic.

This was soo realistic and not some crazy something with too much occ! This was perfect! I was looking for the next button so i decided for the next best thing to reveiw! Lol i cant wait to see some more spitfire from you!

Oh my god. There just need to be more smutfics. You must write more. I insist. This was just so... Perfectly perfect.

AHHHHHH (L)*swoonz*

gosh, this fic was just so... wally n' artemis! ) i alwayz get excited when you post a new fic. you never dissapoint! you're a such a talented writer, so just keep on writin' 4ever, k? :)

I am of the opinion that constructive criticism helps more than simple praise, so here are a few pointers:

I have trouble believing that it would take them four years to do the nasty. To me, at least, neither of them seem like they would wait more than four MONTHS. I found I had to suspend disbelief in that aspect.

You also seem to have an aversion to referring to body parts by their actual names. Repeat after me: Penis. Vagina. Nipple. Clitoris. Bodies are not something to be ashamed of.

This story in particular focused on the physical much more than the spiritual. Which, if you want to do that, is cool. It's just more traditional erotica than I think you were going for. Just something to keep in mind.

Don't interpret this as me disliking your story. I think you have a lot of talent. But hey, everyone can improve, right?

This was great. Keep it up.

Holy hell, is that realism in a smut story? IT IS! It's so damn rare to see someone not just pound out "and they had sex and came together it was hot and it was sticky, let me quote some Danielle Steel at you". This was perfect. It felt very realistic and was completely hot. Excellent job on characterization, realism and even a bit of humor. I really hope you write some more Spitfire stories...I'm severely missing those two in Young Justice: Invasion. Yes, it's AWESOME they're still together, but them not being main cast anymore makes me sad. Also, my first reaction to them living together and her walking around in just a long shirt (at least that's what it looked like) was a very ...'mature' "HOLY HELL, WALLY AND ARTEMIS ARE BANGING! IN A KID'S CARTOON!" I thought maybe it was just me being a perv, but my boyfriend had the same comment. They're totally doing it. Anyway, keep up the amazing work. I'll be watching you in a non stalkerish manner.

Crazy awesome story. I loved it

Wow, just wow. This definitely has to be one of the most well written "first time" fics I've ever read. Okay, so many good things about this especially the fact that the moments were perfect and you didn't have them all unrealistically climaxing together their first time at it (THANK YOU!). I really liked the experimental quality of it too. It was just realistic especially for a first time because it isn't perfect...and especially from the perspective of Wally! I can't imagine him acting any different the first time around with Artemis. The whole munching on something and sprinkling stuff on her face made me bust out laughing because omg of course the boy needs to satisfy that metabolism to make sure that he doesn't tucker out last minute. Their night stand is probably full of condoms and energy bars. Oh and your Wally in general was so perfect. The way he was trying to be confident, but was also hesitant...oh too precious for this world. Also really loved the idea of the whole "vibration" thing. You are very creative and realistic, and I am so glad you wrote this.