This is such an incredible story! do you plan on completing it?

The storys got a potential. I suggest you look for a beta reader.

I LOVE LOVE LOVE! You did sooo good on this story! PLEASE update it.

Wow O_o I love this!/ it needed a little grammar check, but all in all, keep up the good work:)

So Grumman knows she is his grandaughter or not? ._.
I like the diary thing, I'm almost sure that it will be appering in the future.
I don't know what more to review, sorry. Just keep writting like this, is really good-

I LOVEEEEEEE THIS PLEASE UPDATE NO ONE ELSE IS UPDATINGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG TT

Wow I'm really loving this story each chapter you put keeps getting awesome please update very very soon ;)

AWE You just HAD to end it there! Oh well... it is a pretty good cliff hanger even if I really want to know what happens next x( see yaa

-LLM

I like how Riza's trying to get Roy to get to work. She understands the true meaning of hard work even better than he does, due to her past as a slave, and all.

And it looks like a part of her past has been revealed! But if she was with her father, how did she end up becoming a slave?

this chapter is really good keep up the good work

i hope they find out how Riza became a slave

Ha ha I hear you on that algebra. Looking good here. I'll be keeping an eye out for more updates. :)

Yay! A new chapter. I like the memory/flashback you have Riza. Now that's a side of Berthold Hawkeye we don't see very often.

Congratulations on surviving another school year!
Nariko

I don't have much to say other than, "Wow, you're good." This story has an interesting plot/theme. It'as rather well thought out, too.
Sure, there are a few minor grammer mistakes, but can't let that get in the way of a good story, eh?
I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
- Nariko

Oh I can't wait for your next chapter!
Please update soon!

oh dear they're going after Riza now. well i hope they fail miserably

i really like this chapter keep up the good work