Reviews for Without You
MyOtherRideisaMasterCycleZero chapter 20 . 6/24/2019
You'll probably never see this. And no, I don't ever seem to learn my lesson and foolishly continue to read unfinished fics. *sigh - smacks self on the head* It is a FUCKING TRAGEDY that you never finished this. An absolute tragedy.

You are an amazingly talented writer. It was easy to see the evolution in maturity from the beginning to the end of this story. The first several chapters had me cringing at much of the terminology used (glad someone had sense to call you out on using "retard/retarded" so much - not cool!), and some of the characters' behaviours (I wanted to smack jealous Link upside the head SO BAD). Also, I did have a hard time buying that Dark and Sheik would have had such a deep, meaningful, romantic relationship at the age of 10 - certainly not enough to shatter Dark's heart enough that he would ever be afraid to love again. But I digress.

The emotion in your writing is downright palpaple. Not everyone can do that. You are also amazing at fleshing out inner dialogue/self decision-making. And your use of metaphors/similes in your descriptions is downright poetic (if a tad much at times).

I'm quite sad that it's over. I had fallen head over heels in love with Dark and Link's loving closeness. Not knowing where this was going to end up - a happy ending? Or a tragedy? Things were leaning toward tragedy, but half the fun in that is wondering if it will turn out happy. But we'll never know. I hope you are out there somewhere, and well. I'll just sit here and cry now.
Lol chapter 17 . 10/13/2015
Your misogynistic attitude makes me cringe a little but good fic. Hope you eventually work out your women-hating issues.
Guest chapter 21 . 3/9/2015
This is beautiful. It will hurt me if you rush the ending.. I love this story.. So much.. I cant put words! Your writing is amazing and really this had me crying. Please finish it!
MuteHero86 chapter 21 . 1/31/2015
So i read all fucking 21 chapters to not even get a fucking ending? Im really pissed off because you act like this is nothing when it clearly fucking is. This holds a plot throughout the whole 20 damn chapters with multiple chapters being over 10,000 words at that. Yet you decided to stop the story without ending it because you think its nothing. Great thats fucking fantastic. I dont want you to take this the wrong way im just so very upset that this has come to an end after its very confusing last chapter and its full 20 chapters of great lark fanfiction . Im very disappointed that you trashed the story rather than being proud of such a piece of work. Though I am sure you will never continue this, I will be waiting for it like link and dark will wait for each other.
MuteHero86 chapter 10 . 1/6/2015
Man fuck you navi. I don't get it though. How can Navi do gay stuff but when Link does it its wrong? Man oh man. Fuck zelda too jfc lmao i actually liked sheik's pov since it shows another side of the story
MuteHero86 chapter 9 . 1/6/2015
Yaaaaaaaasaaaaaaaaass. You did well. Better than a lot
MuteHero86 chapter 8 . 1/6/2015
I MUST SAY I AM VAGULEY AMUSED THAT DARK DECIDED TO TASTE HIS OWN CUM AFTER HIMSELF ACTING SUCH AS A SEX KING KNOWING EVERYTHING THERE IS TO KNOW. Theyre so cute though holy shit. I love the way you portray link. Not wanting to be the hero because of all the stress. The only thing that kinda bothers me is his lack of courage though he obtains the triforce of courage. Though given, he wouldnt fit the personality if he were couragous. Plus its the whole "im supposed to be this destined hero but what if i dont want to?" Bit. Like i like that.. Lol
MuteHero86 chapter 7 . 1/6/2015
So cuteeee
MuteHero86 chapter 6 . 1/6/2015
Link youre pissing me off why not listen to your lover why would you believe sheik come on its the awkward moment when link is worse than dark link ! Staaaaahpp good job i loved it by the way despite my complaints about link being and idiot lol
MuteHero86 chapter 5 . 1/6/2015
LAST CHAPTER YOU USED THE WORD FUNNER AND FUNNER ISNT A WORD. ITS MORE FUN. And i liked the chapter. Feel so bad for the shitty state links are in
MuteHero86 chapter 4 . 1/6/2015
Aw i want darkxlink :( i can tell your writing was rushed a little at the end but the writing was also very good; filled with plenty of descriptions
MuteHero86 chapter 3 . 1/6/2015
Man fuq u sheik. Down with zeLink! Down! I remember this part of the game, i like your version better because darink for the win hhhhahaha
MuteHero86 chapter 2 . 1/6/2015
Nice nice I like it
MuteHero86 chapter 1 . 1/6/2015
Ahhh okay first thing is first. gRAMMAR. You have amazing grammar between your sentence structure and commas and ny goddess you correctly used a colon! Sorry, it has been so long since I've read a good story with just as goo grammar! I love how they are both in character but you still portray them in your own way. I also REALLY love your ideas for the items in LoZ. The heart container being cracked open; the healing faries being actually faries that talk. One thing though, OoT, the hookshots are hookshots not clawshots. Its really not that big of a deal though because they switch it so much.. Just that it goes with the item's appearance. I don't know anyway I loved this chapter and will continue
SmoshFan2001 chapter 21 . 12/30/2014
*Walks slowly up to gravestone*

"Without You"

MAY 22, 2012 - FEBRUARY 15, 2014

IT WAS A STORY LOVED BY MANY AND TREASURED TO THE FULLEST BY MANY

*kneels down and slowly places bouquet of flowers* *cries eyes out into hands*
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