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this needs little fixing... still the idea is good

Hey. Love your story so far. Please write more! Btw it's spelled akako not Ayako. Other than that the story is good. Please write more! Thanks.

It's AKAKO not AYAKO!

OMG! You are good at lemons! I think some lines would have more of an effect if they were separate from the whole paragraph but I still think this was incredible! Thank you for a great fanfiction!

Wow! I liked the descriptions you used and this idea is really cool! I think it could be improved more if you separated some paragraphs sometimes and worked on your pacing as its a bit fast but I loved the whole fic! I'm looking forward to the next chapter! ;D

well THAT escalated quickly.

Thanks for changing the name (though you should go back and change it in chapter 1).

I liked it, even if it felt pretty rushed.

I'd like it a lot more if you used "Jimmy's" REAL name - Shinichi. All the other characters you have are using Japanese names, so "Jimmy" sticks out. To be honest, I really can't stand it when people use the dubbed names.

i think ayako's name si actually spelt akako, but other than that good story. looking forward to what happens next (can't wait to read jimmy's reaction)