| Reviews for After Death |
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  Q chapter 4 . 6/23/2019 Oh my god - why are you describing SO MUCH needlessly? All this detail you give about what Odette is thinking is all very nice & reflective but my goodness - think about the pace of your story! A little less description and a little more action - I’m not surprised you haven’t updated, I don’t think you know for certain what you want to do with it. |
 ladyofsilverdawn chapter 4 . 6/4/2019 I'm falling in love with your writing! Wow! So much yummy potential with this AU. Such a pleasure to read. |
| Chicwowwow chapter 2 . 10/11/2018 This looks like it could be a pretty interesting story regardless, but why would moving "sideways through time" make Harry mortal? Immortality was bound to his soul apparently, why would moving sideways change his soul more than forward or backwards through time? |
| Ai kudo chapter 4 . 9/30/2018 excelente fics seguir |
| Izaleana chapter 4 . 8/26/2018 This is really interesting. I love the premise and the way she is acting in Hogwarts. The story is great. |
| acetwolf94 chapter 4 . 7/25/2018 I LOVE IT! ADD MORE PLEASE! |
| john86710 chapter 4 . 6/8/2018 Hiya, Shame you stopped writing this one, its good! |
| Pennieyoung chapter 4 . 3/23/2018 Love this story, I hope you update it one day:) |
| Q chapter 4 . 2/7/2018 No wonder you stopped writing - it looks like you completely drained yourself. You focus way too much on description and less on dialogue and action. Description is all well and good, but it can take be tiring to write and when tired, we writers often run out of ‘juice’. Your story plot was interesting - but 14k words and 4 chapters? I’d be at least working toward being halfway through my story and you’re still at the beginning. I’m not saying this to be mean - I really am not. Nor am I saying I’m perfect. But I am an avid reader and I was able to skim through certain parts and still have a good idea of what’s going on. I’m currently writing my first Harry Potter fanfic and on my third ‘book’ and I’ve crafted it in a way that if anyone was to skip any parts, they would be confused. Either way, your writing was good in terms of punctuation, spelling etc. But it definitely needs to increase in pace. Readers want to know what happens - not be drowned in description. |
| naughtylittlesuccubus chapter 4 . 11/17/2017 you have my attention. now I will never leave you alone. my precious.( laughs maniacally while rubbing hands together) please update love ya. |
| swayrabbit chapter 4 . 4/30/2017 Please continue this it's just getting good. I'd love to see where it goes. |
| Hallowtide chapter 4 . 4/16/2017 Oh no! This isn't finished either! |
| MonochromeJoker29 chapter 4 . 12/16/2016 Please continue this story! |
| Observing Spectator chapter 4 . 11/21/2016 Please update |
| Charlie0925 chapter 4 . 10/22/2016 Loving this AMAZING FIC! Just wish that there was more of it, hint, hint! ;o) |
