I don't know why but when you wrote "will edward ever get bella to his house" it really amused me

Ugh, you did it again. ". . . like unicorns and santa and the tooth fairy" No dumb shit. Its ". . .like unicorns, Santa, and the tooth fairy." You might consider looking up punctuation and grammar involved in a list.

"Like ghosts and bigfoot and the loch ness monster?" That's not right. Like, ghosts, bigfoot, and the loch ness monster? Or, remove the comma after like if you don't want the emphasis or pause.

If your gonna edit, do it right. Just saying.

Bella just cant be this fucking stupid.

I don't get why Edward doesn't just be real with her. Instead of saying "I don't where you are" he can tell her the damn truth! Your laying in a bed at my house and this? Its your fucking mind. How hard is that? And if could put some shit into perspective for her.

is this dream bullshit gonna continue much more? Im so board.

I really don't care for this make believe bullshit in her mind, its all so damn pointless to me.

And please tell me how a vampire that sees the future was surprised when Edward and jasper came through the door. She should have been able to hear them pretty far off right? And she can SEE THE FUCKING FUTURE.

So bella is dressed in white...accompanied by a beautiful man …..dressed in all white and she assumes its...HELL? YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA like that makes sense.
omg the stupidity hurts!

I hate it when writers have bella assume or think that Edward is "HER angel" first off, wtf? Really? Second, laying possession of an angel is definitely a sin. Third, it just sounds stupid, like something a child would say.

Bella is catatonic yet picturing Edward dressed in all white, bathed in light? Please tell me your not serious? Geez...…..

If a kiss wakes her up im going to be pissed at how juvenile this is.

Like we really needed a catatonic pov. WTF?

Chapter 17 and all we got so far is bella is in the hospital stuck on stupid, insurance has run out, cullens are vamps, carlisles a doctor, Edward likes bella but doesn't understand...feelings, and bella will be moved to their house. Seems pretty empty so far.

You know what I think about this arrangement? Its fucking unethical, that's what I think. He works for the hospital, he cant be taking patients home.

This seems to have been 13 chapters all about the same...not much. You ever hear the expression say so much to say so little? That's pretty much how im feeling.