Wow it's been a hot minute since your last update! I would love another especially because there's practically nothing on the crowfield curse books anywhere. I didn't ship these two when I read the books, but they actually work. If your still interested in writing this story an update would be amazing!

IM SOOOO HAPPY SOMEONE ALSO SHIPS WILL AND SHADLOK! THIS WAS AMAZING THANK YOU!

It is so good so far, and I loved the books. I thought I was the only who shipped Shadlock and William together!

_ ... wow um very good let me get my head in order... lol dont worry i really do think its good.

Normally I would be very excited to see someone else write for this small fandom and usually I don't have anything against Will/Shad either but this story was just... horrible.
So I'll invoke the right of a fellow Crowfield fan to point out some things:

Not that your writing was too bad, at least in SOME parts it resembled the feeling of the books but then you subjected the reader to sentences ripped directly from one of those romance novels - just a hint: Though they may be set in ye olde English times they are not an accurate account of what people back then and in general talked like.
I get that you sometimes take liberties when writing a non-canon pairing and don't think too much about doing actual research so I can look past the whole gay sex is a-okay in a 14th century christian abbey for the sake of plot convenience. A whole different story is the picture frame and picture and Shadlok's glasses. Those things didn't exist. And those are not just some liberties, it actually throws you off. Let's not talk about wall paint. Those are all things that don't even require research just a little common sense. My disbelief couldn't be suspended far enough to make me buy them. Also, they didn't contribute anything to the story so why put them in in the first place?

Then, the characters. If I hadn't read the books and written about them and you hadn't mentioned their names I wouldn't have guessed who you were writing about, especially with the monks. It's okay to make your own version of the characters if that suits your story but please make it so that you can't radomly exchange their names with any other and make no difference. I read this story to a friend who also knows tha books and she cried over Shadlok's characterization. On the same note: If you are telling the reader that 'Will looks different' than write about HOW he looks different. If you're changing his age that have that factor in or just leave it as it was. I don't think underage-relationships are as big a deal anymore.

About the sex scene: It was forced and for the fuss you made about it way too underwhelming. I get if you're nervous about writing smut but do the testing in another fandom or story where it fits better. Or just don't bother with a story at all and simply put PWP at the top and no one will complain. Taklking about sex - RAPE IS NOT SOMETHING YOU HANDLE THIS LIGHTLY. It's not something you joke about and not something you 'move past' after a short while. It's not something you simply apologize for and hope all will turn out great. Even if it's your partner, even if it's a kink you're writing about. It's also not a great start for a relationship. If Will really feels he has overstepped some boundaries he does so with reasons and all of Shadlok's later actions lose their validity. At the same time: It doesn't do to just have a 'big talk' with tears and all about it, tears and drama do NOT equal propperly dealing with the topic.

I could go deeper into every detail that drove me crazy but I think I'll leave it at that.

As I said, normally I wouldn't bother even raging about some fanfic but this was posted in a small fandom that was built on a great book series and it feels personal because I write a great deal about those characters as well and I feel especially protective about them since me and my friend had a nice, long e-mail conversation with Pat Walsh and it drives me nuts to see her characters get butchered.
Another thing that just pushes all the wrong buttons: This doesn't seem only clumsy but outright LAZY.
For the love of crap, do some research.
PLAN something. Read the books again.
Or at least put an AU or PWP warning up there, seriously.

This could have been a lot more insulting if my friend had her hand in this review. She was ANGRY.
Over and out.

o_o. Lol xD Is your icon supposed to be Will and Shadlok (Shadlok being the bad ass with the shades)?

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Me. No. Have. Clue.
I'm probably should've read the book, shouldn't I have?
Damn.
Oh well.
The kitchen scene was gooood.
Really good.
Like, I loved it.
GAAAH 3
My impatient soul is going to go read the next chapter now.
And will P.M you an actual review. xD

DAMN IT! I WANTED SHADLOCK TO KISS WILLIAM WHEN HE WAS TAKING HIS BRUISE AWAY! Immediately after would've worked to!
But the following part makes up for it :3

Damn you! Now I must read two books xD But I shall do it! Just because I want to find out more about this :3 But for now, your fan fiction is suitable xD

I just randomly came to check this out, but that was good sex xD But seriously, that WAS passionate, and sweet (:

Now, I'm going to actually read this story from the beginning, and P.M you xD

... OH MY GOD... -insane laugh- I FREAKING LOVE THIS. and that is all i have to say on the matter :3

I love this pairing! Keep it up!

i love it so far :) i thought Shadlok and Will would make a good couple but no one had written or drawn anything for it :/ I love your story though :D it's perfect. It matches the setting of the book and everything as well :)