Please don't thank Speedman12. He should be ashamed of himself if he thinks this is fixed.

See, the plot sounds very good. Good enough that, if the punctuation was proper, this would EASILY be one of the top stories.

I damn love your story! (Even though the pairing was a bit weird.) I hope you can write more Percy Jackson fanfics. I think your ideas are cool. Can you write a fanfic about Annabeth and Percy in high school and nobody dies? I love this website a lot. Can the pairing also be Annabeth/Percy?

I really like it! It is a bit sad though. I like the fact that there are lots of chapters for me to read. I like your ideas. I have been thinking about this story for the last two days. Thank you for writing this fanfic. I have told my friends about it. I hope you can write more Percy Jackson fanfics.

*gasp*she is in tarturaus

No line breaks, too fast paced, too much grammatical mistakes.

Could you add “ to the sentences and go over the chapter and check for spelling mistakes.

Also could you get someone else to check it, it has many mistakes.

But great storyline so far.

there are a lot of grammar mistakes just in this chapter alone

This was one of the most incredible stories I've ever read. Normally, I lose interest in super long stories and just skip to interesting chapters, but you kept my attention throughout and I didn't want to miss any details. Your characterization was brilliant, everything was thought out and interesting. I absolutely loved Nyx, and I really like the way the Olympians didn't fear Percy like most stories, but embraced it and trusted him because they loved him too. Sometimes grammar and punctuation didn't make sense but the plot allows you to push on. I'll be honest, I'm slightly disappointed with the ending, as I feel like it would be too dragged out and would have been best if Percy healed, or died, preferably healed as it would complete the story. Other than that it was amazing and you're super talented! Thank you for writing this

Phantasmos is the god of nightmares.

Why didn't Percy use the gloves on the girls arm. And you said he could only water travel if he's in a body of water. How did he go from his apartment back to Atlantis when he first learned how to use it. As far as I know sally Jackson apartment isn't a body of water so how did he water travel from there

update soon

nice man

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great plot... bad story... too fast paced