It's about time some did a tony topping Gibbs story. Well done!

I love how smart you made tony! Hoping for more :)

I really enjoyed your take on Gibbs and Tony. It was well written and easy to read. The first chapter had a few mistakes in the sentences but they were easy to overlook due to how well the story flowed. I beg..."please, oh please oh please add another chapter and soon because I have to know how they tell and what the reactions are", now that the begging portion is over. Great writing and a great story!

love that jethro and tony are more educated then they let on and that they are together, wondering how the team will react...

Great chapter/sequel. I really enjoyed it and thought it was great that Tony and Gibbs e were more worried about their other secret rather then the one about their degrees. I can't wait to read the next one. Keep up the good work.

I have been so surprised to like this genre. It's a great story. I for one would like to see how they tell the team the "bigger secret" and how the team relates to it, maybe even a wedding? Just asking.

I don't want to sound harsh. I really don't. I just... Have you ever watched more than one episode of NCIS? These two are so terribly out of character that if I changed the names, no one would ever think that they're Gibbs and Tony. I know this was your first, and I definitely DO NOT want to discourage you in your writing! Just...try to make the characters even a *tadbit* more realistic. For example, there is no way in hell that *the* Leroy Jethro Gibbs would spill all of his secrets in one date, or that he'd just jump into bed with Tony. That's...such a Tony thing to do.

Usually, I wouldn't mess with being nice in a review to a story like this. But you have some real potential to be a really great fanfiction writer. Usually people's first stories aren't that great, unless you've secretly been writing novels for years before posting a single thing, but who does that? Lol.

I think there is one thing you could do better when writing...okay, two things.

1. Make the characters as true to the real deal as possible. Gibbs is a bastard. "The second B is for bastard" is not an empty phrase. Tony's a playboy, and he's kind of annoying. Make sure you really know your characters before you set out to write them. You'll get a lot more praise, then.

and 2. Whether you're writing an original piece or just a nice fanfiction, and no matter the length, it has to be realistic. No one spills their deep dark secrets on the first date, and no one, well hardly anyone, jumps into bed. Just the fact you have a character saying "I'm not gay!" And then a paragraph later wanting some but$ex is so unrealistic. Real people don't do that.

Your dialogue gets a 6 out of ten. Its a little rough. Meaning it doesn't flow very smoothly in places, but it doesn't sound like its a robot talking, either. Your spelling is good, I didn't catch any mistakes. There may have been some, I just didn't catch them. Your grammar was good, as well. And I *WISH* the site would let me log in right now, I'd love to get any feedback from you if you have it. But it won't. I've already logged a complaint...anyway. Hit me up if you want to reply. You can find me on this site, under the name of EdgeofDarkness. I look forward to seeing how you improve over time. :)

Thanks for a great story. I'd like more.

Enjoyed it!

Not too bad for your first try. Keep it up, with each story you will feel more and more comfortable and will find your own style. Great job.

Great one shot different, but very well written. You should write more stories for NCIS.

Awsome first story keep up the good work and I look forward to seeing more work from you, just add more SEX lol.

Great 1st story. You should definitely do a sequel or two. Keep up the good work.

I am impressed! This is pretty darn good and for a first story, it's amazing. Keep writing, please.