the sex scene was spicy and the ending about killed me. i choke while laughing but all's good.

please update soon

Becky xxx

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I loved the ending! So hilarious!

Excellent

Lmbo at the end. That was nice!

Thanks for writing. Good story.

First off, I got to this story from seeing the banner on and I thought the banner fit this really well. I loved reading Alice and Jasper, I have not read many stories, or one shots of that pairing so this was a nice change. It was nice to see inside the pair in such an intimate moment, and to feel the emotions that run through them during it. Great Lemon by the way. This was well written and a great read. I have not read too many one shots but lately im reading more and more of them. I really love getting the inside peak into their relationship and would love to read more about them. Great Job on this.

Really good you should do mire Alice and jasper their my fav(:

Loved the ending! Very hot and sweet! Love oneshots like this.

Loved this! Starting with Jasper's worrying to the way they made each other feel better...and that's not even mentioning the lemon, LOL! Like I said, loved it. Perfect ending, too :P Gotta love Emmett catching them!

It won't let me sign in, so gotta review anon..sort of!

Loved this story. It has a mixture of romance, hotness, and fluff! The only qualm I have if that you put commas where there is not supposed to have them and it kind of disrupts the flow of the story, all you have to do is go back and fix that punctuation and it'll be perfect!

Wow, just wow! That's amazing! I can honestly say that's one of the best Jalice lemons I've ever read. and saying it's your first lemon, pfhhwoarrr some people have 10 lemony oneshots on their account and still can't write something this good.

Now this is a oneshot every Jalice fan should read, or even people who don't really like Jalice, it's so worth it!

Please write more! ...and more, and more... muuuuuch more!

ps, love how it ends xD teehee

I'm very sincere when I say that you can't tell that this is your first lemon and the fact that you haven't written in so long. I think it's a great one shot and great to read.

Good job!