So cute

whahahhaha. she's counting Natsume's words! LOL

and to think that Natsume makes a schedule! OMG, I'm laughing now...hahahaha. Anyway, I like the Permy-and-Koko routine :)

when I read the first paragraph, i was like..."what crime!"

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and then I'm smiling already while reading the other paragraphs!

I really like the innocence! That's what I miss these days with the other fanfictions! ehehehe :)

you also did a good job of describing them. Short, sensible and fun! I like that 'reminded me of vampires'-part. nice one.

i admire the innocence! You made it so effective Nice JOB!

Its good haha I liked the part where Natsumes face turned red x)

this is so Fuyuki-ish.

you know what i mean. )

Glaring mistake in summary. There should not be an "off" after knew.

Missing punctuation and various grammar mistakes can be spotted from just me glancing through your beginning. Confusion between plural and singular, past and present. Okay, there are a lot of missing punctuation marks.

I know that this diary entry is written by an eight year old, so maybe you're trying to sound like a kid, but recurring grammar mistakes are still NOT forgiveable.

Get a beta.

-A