I really enjoyed reading this, everyone was super in character, great job :)

I LOVE THIS!
It's GOOD!
Great job!

I loved this! Oh, how I loved this. I wouldn't say that the fluff is that much though, it's not like it was anywhere near sappy. The whole angst angle helps there. ;D

I love this and the person who wrote it.

Wow, I can't believe he's alive.. I mean- he was crushed! This was a good ONE-shot! I liked Yoshino's reaction; it's like any parent's would be, but I'm a bit disappointed by the lack of reaction from Shikaku.

Oh dear god my mouth is filled with cavities! Too much Fluff! I love it though, it keeps me alive. Great Story BTW, very good. :) -Insanity

The fluff! THE FLUFF! First part i nearly cried, second bit i was thinking holy shit, third bit i laughed and cried at the same time. I SWEAR you're such a good writer! Keep it up! 3

I just read Mockingjay. So many loved characters gone. My first reaction to your story was covering my ears and curling in a ball and yelling "TOO SOON! TOO SOON!" xD No, kidding. Though I did think it. I think I'm staaarting to become a bit of a fangirl to you. I love your ShikaTemas to death. And this one was no different. I love the deep feeling, and the in-character-ness and the freshness of it. I like how you manage to grab a plot that has been done before and write it in a completely new angle that gives such perspective to it. Thumbs up! I loved it!

The way you write is so beautiful. And after reading this, I really don't know what to type here. I'm too lost for words.

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GODDAMNIT! You almost flipped the bitch out me! I know you wouldn't let Shikamaru die, but damn his cute knees, I felt like I'll be the one killing the medic people if he didn't survive! Oh my green goodness! ;A;

You, my queen, are a pro in twisting the emotions that somewhere along the way, I felt my lungs constrict painfully. Good show on the description part on how badly every one of them were. (Though, I'd probably don't want to know how close to death the were.. Still.. ;A;)

My only comment is that you tenses kept on shifting. o.o

Most specifically on the last part of the story. The last part was filled with present tense sentences but... the rest of story were shown in past tense.. So.. e_e

Yeah, that's the only thing I could comment on. And some misspelled words that I couldn't remember exactly where they are. I have to reread it again to find them. Haha.

Nevertheless, IT WAS BEAUTIFUL! ;A;

Regards,

-MVDR-