I don't know how I haven't reviewed this because I've read it a few times and I love it. It's fantastic. I love this view on PJO from minor characters and believable, likable OCs. It's great.

Okay, so here we go:
ta, musa, i loved this the first time i read it. It's a wonderful and brilliant piece, but because I am obligated to write more, I will. Quite willingly.
1. characters were written really nicely. I liked how.. solid they are in their personalities and well character, and it's consistent throughout the story.
2. I think the best part about this in general is the conflict. Two sort of friends with a mutual friend who happen to be demigods will always run into something interesting.
3. Fiona's so cute.
4. It's quite hilarious. I love the balance between humor and seriousness, the little moments that pile on top of each other.
5. A PowerPoint. With Zeus laughing evilly and demigod rivalry. Oh yes, I have been waiting to see this in fanfiction.
6. That little staking out the monster hideout scene.
Okay this is kind of a mess of a review, but I enjoyed reading this a lot. I liked the length of it. I liked the characters and the plot, the hilarity of it, the absolute beauty that is mortality trying to come up with answers to the unknown.
I'd love to come back and read over this again and again; it's actually the perfect fic for those times where you really don't want to read about how these demigods are awesome and kickass and instead are just people who happen to fight monsters but also happen to struggle with things like cheating.
also that little nugget in which Apollo's kids are bad at poetry... i want to steal that headcanon and run with it.
-ae

Ello Mello.

Just let me squeal because Nico di Angelo is undoubtedly the cutest wonder in the world. All characters want admission into the Nico di Angelo Defense Squad. Heck, I want an admission in the defense squad, my objective is his utter happiness.

ANYWAYS. I like your OC's. Fiona is my spirit character. That line was just perfect: "Are we talking about the same three black belts, obsessed with pink, honor math student who barely scraps by anywhere else, cheerleader since middle school here? Because I'm not sure if normal even applies to Fee." Lol, I half-expected Fiona to be an aphrodite child but the mortal aspect is just as good.

You know my reviews by the now, they're all over the place, but yeah! Anyways, I love Marcus. He's so funny and his relationship with Fiona is just as adorable and he cares, which is just as cute. Like we just broke up… and what did he do?"'and it was squee-worthy when he was just like I can't tell her I'm a demigod because Fiona is so practical and I was just, that boy, it's a wonder that they break up all the time.

They sound like that type of couple where you wanna puke at how cute they are.

Estelle. I do like her. I like her cuz she obviously cares about about Fiona. She squeals over Nikki and Will. Also, I like the way she pokes fun at Marcus. Again, they're obviously those type of friends— they claim they hate each other, but they're always poking at one another. And her PowerPoint was hilarious "Greek Gods and their Roman Ripoffs."

*I'd similarly told him the stick up his ass could have be used to leverage the planet out of the solar system.— that line was GOLD. I was just smiling forever.

And Fiona— Aww, babe, wears her heart on her sleeves. Sweet, how she didn't want to stand in the way of her best friend and ex-boyfriend.

I found the storyline. It's very, uhh, what's the word— not mundane but everyday. Like a peek into an everyday lifestyle— slice of life— and it was awesome. Rare that I like OC's besides my own, but I did immensely like yours. All very different but I enjoyed them all the same.

It is interesting to note that I also expected Fiona to be clear-eyed because my mortal OC is clear-eyed and has known about the mythological world since he was small, but it was interesting to see one without being clear-eyed.

Ahh! I wish I could write more but I am very, very bad with writing good things about OCs and stories. Usually, I excel at writing flaming reviews for Mary Sues. But I can't flame this one-shot because it was perfect like usual.

I didn't see any mistakes.
Am I just curious on how all three of them are in the same high school plus Nico and Will?

how can he not have known about sunscreen?
I like the Greek/Roman dynamic- or lack thereof- that you have in this one.

I like your take on it all. Really, I do. Thanks for participation :)
I enjoyed the nod to tHG with Cinna and Kayla's unexpected side of the Greek Fire was increasing as well. It added more depth to the already intreaugeing character.

Ello Babe. I decided to review in an attempt to pay you back for all the amazing reviews you've given me. I can't give you a scathing review because you don't deserve it and I can't give you a nitpicky review because I'm not really a nitpicky person, BUUUUT maybe if I put some of my newly acquired AP LIT skills to use I might get a cookie. ;P

Ok, firsties, very funny story. I especially love the somewhat ambiguous ending with Daniel is like "Katie." lol, wouldn't it be delightfully ironic if Daniel was a mortal who could see through The Mist and see the Hydra carcass burning in front of their house and Katie fighting with a machete… and ha! This might make a dent in Katie's classic American dream (nice touch btw!) w/ a white picket fence and two kids… ooh, I forgot, you answered it with this: "One week into Daniels' proposal window, she got an Iris Message which promptly shattered that delusion."

And look, you are a great authoress because you don't try to stuff a bajllion 'subtle' clues/imagery in regards to her godly parent down our threats. Her connection with the gods/Demeter are actually subtle! YAY! I couldn't help but smile at the mentioning of her possibly cannibalistic rosebushes and Katie's want to talk about her town famous oranges.

I liked your interpretation of Katie. I don't know much about her in regards to fanfiction or the one scene in the Last Olympian so I myself don't have a clear picture in my head of her, but I definitely can get on board with yours. I imagine her like most demigods (the "weaker ones" especially) who would like to forget all about Camp Halfblood and the crap that it entailed. I'd like to think that they are like Katie and would crave some goddamn normalcy for once. At least Greek demigods. Roman demigods definitely have the advantage… I wonder if Katie would of chosen New Rome if she knew about it…

I wonder what about the symbolism behind the color pink is? My AP skills have failed me. It's like… pink I know is a traditionally female color and is associated with things like femininity and breast cancer awareness and it's the softer tone of the passionate red. And I just read the pink also has a connection to like the saying, "To see the world through rose-colored glasses." some maybe pink on both kayla and pink in general in this story is like an ironic twist of some sort? A softer sign than the blaring caution of red?

Like Katie is trying to see her situation through rose-colored glasses. She claims she is methodical yet she is surprisingly optimistic about how she can shove away the mythological part of her life. She thinks can escape from away from her demigod side; "she'd still gotten wind of it from various sources who refused to let her go as easily as she'd tried to let them go." but she obviously can't? Kayla, Mercedes, her monster-proof garden, the machete in her trunk, Travis, heck— the Hydra proves this.

Quotes/Passages I really, really like:
1. Because at the end of the day, she knew why Kayla was being well- Kayla. She was terrified that Katie's plant smokescreen wasn't going to work (she wasn't the only one), and was spending her days in a frozen state of terror mixed with anticipation. She was dealing with it by being loud and obnoxious and by living up her life as much as she possibly could in what little time she might have left.

2. "Greek fire," Kayla panted beside her, "and gasoline. And um- some kind of explosive stuff. I uh- picked up a few things from the last cache I passed. There weren't any demigods stationed there, but there were supplies so…"

that was done in such an RR fashion. I could literally see that written in the serious. Hahaha!

3. "Those were uh- some pretty fancy moves," Kayla offered, a little apologetically, "I think you are to a machete what Percy Jackson is to a swor- oops."

4. (Travis Stoll, for example, was currently dating a very nice con-artist girl in Chicago now; but he still called her up occasionally to whine at her. Personally, Katie's sympathies were more inclined towards the girl, but Travis needed support and so support she gave because that was part of this whole platonic BFFs thing.)

Yup, there are like tons more but that would involve me copy and pasting most of the story, so, these are my favorite that made me giggle and smile. An special feat since I just woke up and I feel a bit murderous… I digress.

I found one nitpicky part. I think you mean New York in this part:"… living in a charming building in a pretty suburb that she had inherited from her paternal great-aunt;blessedly far away from New (York? I think you forgot to add York)…"

Ooh. And what happened with like Daniel? Wasn't he visiting his Daddy or something that that caused him to miss his and Katie's dinner date… ehh! Whatever. Doesn't really matter. I like his arrival all the same.

Overall, fantastic story. I really liked it. I LOVE your writing style and your awesome skills and all that fabulous shit. *whines* I wish I could write like you. Keep up the great work. :)

*sorry for all the mistakes found in my review. I hope it's still somewhat coherent.

Ha! The Hephaestus kids!

First off, the idea of Camps Coalition Bunker? Beautiful!
And I enjoy your OC Madison as well as all the contrasts that you highlighted. Oh woe (not exactly the correct usage of woe...)the Seargent voice not to mention the Greeks reaction.

Spelling/Grammar: 3/3

Flow: 2/2

Originality: 3/2

Overall Impact: 2/2
Total: 11/10

Aww! I love it! Haha, this happened to me and my cousin once. We were at the beach and she started freaking out because she had gotten sunburned, hence making her think that the water was poisoned. It was hilarious.

I love love love how you write Nico. He's not a five-year-old wearing Thomas the Tank Engine jammies (seriously, I saw a fic with him like that *shudder*) but not the eighty-year-old guy in a thirteen-year-old's body either. This is just perfect. :)

Honestly, I really like these little slice-of-life one-shots. Some can be awful, but the way you write them is great. Please don't be afraid to do more in the future. I can guarantee you at least one reader.

Pointless oneshots are usually the best! They're funny and happy and light :)

[This review has been submitted as part of a prize on achieving second position in the competition "The 5 Drabbles Challenge".]

I really liked this.

Nico's reaction to the sunburnt was hilarious as was his earlier assumption that he'd been cursed. I think you wrote the humor very nicely.

It was also nice reading the small parts about the camps trying to get along.

Though, I thought that the flow was a bit off at the beginning. The last two lines also seemed too abrupt.

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HAHAHAHA! Hilarious :)

A one-shot about sunburns. Pure freakin' genius.