Yay, I'm finally up to date. Once again, the adults are discarded for being virtually useless. I enjoyed Tamers and Savers because they broke that tradition. Hopefully, the adults would be of significance in future chapters.

Is the Vision forgotten now? Little of them was seen right after Amanda escaped.

Datamon could be a really interesting villain. He is basically what Amanda would have become if she let her anger and hate control her. To have a dark version of her tempt her down that path must have been creepy.

Less happened in this chapter compared to previous ones in favour of story and character building. I guess I'm done with this story for now, hope you can finish it one day.

Goodness, I'm on a roll here. One more chapter to go.

So we get another scene with the backstabbing master and his poor abused slave. While it's good to see another villain that's cruel and cunning, it is yet another villain that makes me think "oh hey, it's the bastard again. Come on, let's just kill him already" He's not too memorable and a tad bit boring. He reminds me of Emperor Ken, to be honest. Gotsumon on the other hand has known torture and brute force for a long time and lives in fear of his master. I can see this going one way, though I could be really wrong.

The confession scene with Yvonne went exactly as I expected it to, except I thought Yvonne to start hating her completely. There's a chance for the two of them to salvage what is left of their friendship. It would be great to see Amanda bringing back Devidramon and the two girls interacting more closely in the future, no more of this secrets and manipulation and messed up BS.

Getting Perkins arrested was a smart move, since that would probably have happened in real life. I'm glad he got off without any problem.

I like it that Izzy's grammar is far from perfect. It is fitting though, because one would be suspicious if his English is as good as a native speaker. You would know, wouldn't you? Your profile reveals that much.

On a final note, I realised that you managed to focus completely and detailedly on Amanda because she's the only Main character alongside Penguinmon in this story. I don't know if I can achieve that for my own, with so many kids and so many partners. The interactions were great, and you can see that they were really attached to each other. Well done, great chapter.

Once again, another chapter and scenario that proves just how gullible and naive Amanda is. For a child genius she really needs risk management classes. She didn't try to test the reversal programme? Tsk Tsk.

On the other hand, the fighting sequence and journey through the network was inspired by Our War Game, I believe? Everything was so reminiscent of the movie. Poor Amanda, I wonder what will happen next.

Hey there, here's another review. I thought this chapter was a good one, although most of it felt less of digimon and more like a novel.

So Amanda has decided to reject any form of religion, to the dismay of her parents. Also, she sees through the eyes of Silver Star that her brother does care, which is cool. The idea of Meramon being sent back to the Digital World inspired me to do something similar in MoTOS as well, so thanks I guess. Finally I have come to appreciate the helpfulness of an inside man. It's always infuriating when a mole betrays us but we enjoy having spies.

Overall everything else was really detailed insight into Amanda growing up. I like the descriptions and thought flow a lot.

Hey, I'm back for a final review of 2015. How cool is that? It would be better if I posted this at midnight but whatever. You could always read this at midnight :P

Nice one, penguinmon learning to read. I was always bothered by how the digimon never visited the real world and yet knew stuff. I never thought that they wouldn't be able to read, given they never WANTED to read. I want to do this in my story as well, if you don't mind. After all, the digimon do need to keep themselves occupied while the children are at school.

That fat part... Was kind of interesting. Guess girls really cannot stand the thought of being fat huh? It's like, programmed into their genes

Hmm, I'm not a Christian (I'm Buddhist in fact) and it's enlightening to read a bit about what people do at church. I couldn't have chosen a better timing to read the Star Wars part XD. It's a Star Wars year end indeed. I think it's a good issue about religion, since it commands us to practice faith regardless of the contradictions presented before us. Speaking about science and proof, I have actually witnessed stuff during my rituals. The monk loses her voice every time at certain parts (no kidding, it consistently happens) because deities and Buddha are present, and believe it or not, we actually have a Buddha in mortal form as the leader of our religious group. That's proof enough for me. Do you ever question your religion? I mean, yeah in this story you presented some really contradictory points about the Bible but has anything actually shaken your faith? Or do you even follow a faith at all?

Overall not a really action or humor packed chapter like your previous ones but still a good read. Well, this story is a Good Book on its own anyway *chuckles* happy new year, dear sir.

Back for another review :) it's great to read and review every few days. I can't do it everyday because I'm not free, but I can do one every half a week, o guess.

The announcement "welcome to drive bay" was SO corny yet it was fitting. Where's the drumroll? Where's Gobber announcing "welcome to Darwin Training" and the soundtrack playing in the background?

The Commandomon were acting a bit fishy. My guess is they had heard of Tai and the others, therefore they were excited when they knew Amanda was a Digidestined. Now they want her on their side so that they can win the war. That's my hazard shot in the dark.

I keep forgetting Amanda is still a child and she gets overexcited and forgets to take care of herself. Luckily penguinmon is there to make sure she doesn't drop.

"Fishermon". I like that. It's a correction that shows it is the Digital World and everything is a mon.

Wait, those Commandomon were soldiers of the Vision? Now I kind of suspect them even more.

After reading this, I realise that most fanfictions never really defined the Digital World and its residences. They actually sound like humans, civilians in an area under the control of an oppressive rule. The Vision is basically the Digimon Communist Party, I guess. Also, the Digimon town reminds me of the one from frontier, xros wars and the games. They actually seem like a place. Many stories only focus on the Digidestined fighting, having complex relationships with each other, having to save the world etc. Very few actually describe the Digital World as a livable place. I also realised that the series never really focused on this point either. Anyway, kudos for doing what most people did not.

And you continue to address another issue, which is how Digimon reproduce. Yes, they don't make babies but how DO they make babies then?

... How are they going to pay for it? I suppose they'll end up working to pay their debts later like Matt and Joe.

I was rooting for Leon and Amanda but I think that Yvonne needs him more. So unless she meets another guy that's as good or better, I hope Amanda is matured enough to let her crush go.

I was right. They're just interested in her combat capabilites. I didn't expect Dorumon of all Digimon to be the leader though. Reminds me of my own Emperor's Dorumon and Rega, leader of the Dorugamon.

I have never heard of ginkakumon but he is a fitting general. Maybe I'll use him in my story someday, if you don't mind.

Amanda is not old enough to negotiate as a prisoner. I would have acted like her if I was her age. But as you grow older you tend to figure ways out of situations. But for a genius Amanda was foolish to be so straightforward in her answers. She doesn't have the abilities and capacity of Artemis Fowl, who would have talked his way out of this situation.

So it's a three way war. Resistance vs Vision vs Hunters.

All you needed was for Ginkakumon to say "take this Fishwife to the brig" and boom, captain barbossakumon.

Didn't Amanda learn martial arts? Or was she just too keen at using her mind and neglected her kinesthetic abilities? She could have escaped easily. Or maybe it's just me expecting too much for her.

I think this review is as long as the chapter by now. We're not even halfway through yet.

Ha, Disneyvolving.

I liked the soldier scene. Gaomon is a bully. As Ginkakumon said, it's refreshing. Anyway, I have a feeling they won't let her go that easily. Then it'll be the "but you promised!" and "I lied" trope all over again.

See? Expected. Too clichéd.

And it seems that I was half right myself. I thought it was fishy that Amanda caved in so easily. It's a perfect comeback.

It seems that Amanda has a heart after all. Soldiers are not bad. They just do what they're told. Well, most of the time. I've seen documentaries and recordings of soldiers being bullies and it's disturbing.

Hah, the song was a foreshadowed moment. It's a nice twist.

And finally we're at the end. I'm surprised at myself for not picking up the clues earlier that it was Jin. How old is he now? Which chapter Unintended does this part take place? Is it after Unintended or what? Jin seems older in here.

Anyway, it was an awesome chapter to read before I go to sleep. The plot is complex and the details are descriptive. This piece of work really is inspirational. My only complain is the length of a chapter. I struggled through and skimmed at times just to understand the story. Still, I had a good time reading. See you next chapter :)

Hello, I'm back for another chapter review :D I had been busy recently but I finally found time to give this chapter another well-deserved review.

I'm curious about this... Other world that is across the portal. Even the name is weird. It sounds less of a new world than a tropical resort.

I'm not sold on the Vision either. I want to see what type of villain he is. I think the name is supposed to make he sound more mystical and that he has the ability to see into the future, which is kind of weird. It's like the Matrix Oracle being the bad guy. The name doesn't really give the evil vibe. At least not yet.

I think Yvonne is more messed up than she shows. How naive can Amanda be to not question her friend? One should always keep an open mind about stuff like this. Anyway, my prediction about Devidramon and Frigimon squaring off was complete destroyed. In a way I'm glad for that, because it shows the story is still unpredictable.

The rest of the chapter was a good read. I'll be back for more soon, when I can manage my time more efficiently. Oh by the way, chapter 6 of MotOS is out. Please check it out if you have time :)

Yes! Long but worth the time, this chapter was (hmm, speaking like Yoda, I am).

I couldn't help but feel happy for Yvonne, if ever slightly. The happiness of having a friend that has your back is the best. I was hoping that Amanda and Yvonne would have a standoff, but Silver Star went ahead and hit Devidramon with the banstick. I feel pity for the girl, because I think all she wanted was power, to be in control of her life, to not get bullied or cast out. In response to the stress she faced, she sought a power to keep herself safe. In the end, she was still a young lass who wanted a normal life and a good friend, I guess.

I knew the gender switch would somehow become a gag in this story. Trying to tell Leon that SS is a girl, and one that has a crush on him is going to be tough. You did well in describing the inner panic of Amanda having to hide her identity from her crush while fighting her excitement at being so close to him. That was fun to read.

So that's why Tara hates Amanda's guts. She's that school slut/princess that is part of the 'cool' gang. Is it just me or is that a stereotype bully in western schools? Forgive me, for I received Asian education and the case of bullies in my school is totally different.

I'd like to point out that an IQ of 140 is merely more intelligent than the rest. Amanda's case should be higher than 160, that of a genius. I have a friend whose IQ is 140 and he isn't writing programs yet, plus he's older than Amanda by 8 years. He's just which at understanding some stuff and noticing patterns, but that's nothing out of the ordinary.

Again, the other side of Amanda shows. Her frustration at being held back, her lack of empathy towards those less smart than her and her occasional immaturity. I kinda guessed she would pull the trick of spying on Mr Detective but that extent is just awesome. She's literally Artemis Fowl reborn in the digimon universe.

Wow, I knew Pellatrie (is that how you spell it?) had something up his sleeve but he just got outwitted and outdated. Amanda did take Izzy's words seriously. A bit too seriously, actually but it worked and that's all that matters. Just asking for fun, but what's up with Americans and Canadians? There's nothing going on, right? I know South Park likes to make fun of Canada though. It jeers at everything and anything. Anyway, secrets are powerful. This case just proved that, and it was darn well written.

Finally, Ted gets what he deserves. Well, better than what he deserves actually. He should have been thrown into jail for numerous crimes against the people of Roxanne (did you get this name from a pokemon game? It sounds familiar) or at least pay Perkins back all the money he took. Exile with an addition of cash? Too good to be true, man. But it is an apt ending for him. I hope he gets into trouble somewhere else and finally gets punished. Poor Perkins didn't get back what he lost...

Anyway, this chapter had lots of stuff going on in it. I can see you put in a lot of effort and I appreciate that. Keep it up, you're doing great at this!

Whoa, this is one of the longest chapters I've read. The sheer about of plot is overwhelming. But I persevered and here we are with a review.

The insight to Amanda was intrinsically described and I loved every bit of it. Starting off with her outburst and childish notions of wanting fame and fun, we see another side of her. Suddenly the child is gone and a thought machine replaces her. Like her mother, I was taken aback that she would lash out like that. To know that it was just an episode, like schizophrenia, was comforting yet disturbing. Comforting in a sense that she won't go Kaiser Ken on us but disturbing that she has a problem like that. You perfectly described a child genius at work, the difficulty and turmoil of being the mother of one and a adolescent who is aware that she could irreversibly damage her relationships with others had her mom not calmed her down. Afraid of herself, really. Very well done.

If you wanted to write a snobbish, infuriating hobo that blackmails the gullible protagonists into giving in to his demands, then you're doing a darn good job of it. I seriously hate the guy right now. I'm patiently waiting for a digimon to torture and kill him. But you know what they say, sometimes justice just never comes. I'm the type of person who takes revenge into my own hands, so I wonder what such nice people like perkins and Amanda would do.

Similarly to Ted, Yvonne is getting on my nerves as well. However, I can't help but want to know how her plans will work out. Perhaps she and gazimon would work out to be better friends and partners in the future. If they somehow get along with Amanda more maturely like Harry and Malfoy 19 years later, it'd be awesome.

The cop knows his stuff. So far you're doing a bang up job of writing the POVs of the characters. He hinted at a second employer. What will the double agent do? Whose side is he on? Will he catch on to the incident? What was in the floppy disc Amanda help up? So many questions that need answering!

This chapter was a read for sore eyes, truly. Excellent work, mate. I'm ready for the next chapter.

Here's another review for you! I have to say, I'm enjoying this story pretty much. The interactions are hilarious, and the part with Philip was genius. I got a Chucky vibe when I read it.

References to the original digidestined are nicely done as well. It's like a Gundam Seed Astray story, occurring halfway across the galaxy from the main storyline, yet we somehow like the characters like the protagonists.

The haunted house episode was the best, because of the in-depth plot and creepiness.

The banstick idea was really creative. Amanda is sort of like izzy and Ken combined, had the not turned evil.

Overall this story is truly a great art of work. I can't wait to read the next chapter now, so stay tuned for more reviews ;)

Two words: FREAKING ASS LONG. Oh wait that was three. I loved the interaction between Amanda and Penguinmon. You'd think they'd partner up immediately and do crazy stuff but nooooo they weren't partners. Yet. The dialogue was light hearted and fun, and I can feel how disappointed Amanda was. Also, some twists were just so realistic I couldn't believe I didn't think of that. Tuna! I actually expected a real piece of fish, not canned food. Well done with this segment.

Then it gets better. You know, what I enjoyed most about your stories so far is that you managed to incorporate side characters that have their own adventures, while being somehow related to the original cast. That doesn't steal the spotlight but gives a refreshing change of perspective every now and then. I'm kind of inspired to write my own story with this style right now, but sadly I'll have to wait till I'm at least half done with the main stories. That'll be ages away.

The bear and pregnancy joke was cute and I liked the tuna breath running gag.

This chapter is about finding herself and her partner. This ain't some clichéd story about two people meeting up and forming a bond immediately. It's about FORGING it. It perfectly expresses the wanting (yours, perhaps? Hell, actually all digimon fans' wanting) to get a partner and the fear and disappointment when the digimon turns out to not be the one. I love it.

Oh and I forgot to mention this In the last chapter. "gundam wing, if you were wondering" in brackets isnt the best way to state that the posters and models were from that series. Just mentioning the name once the first time is good enough.

I thunk the mojyamon scene was inspired by Percy Jackson and the sea of monsters. I don't know, but I somehow keep thinking of grover in a wedding dress.

And finally, the parents get called again part. I can't wait to see how the father berates the daughter. Again.

Anyway, this story is really really great. I like it and I'm going to follow. Cheers, you've found yourself another follower!

Wow, this is much more impressive than I thought it would be. Given the title I thought it would be quite slow moving, relaxing and... I'll admit it, boring. I was pleasantly surprised. This first chapter alone is great, I'll give you that.

First we have Amanda: genius, outcast, knows things (digimon) that others don't, basically an underdog. While I like her character, I've seen it so many times before. However, The part that truly impressed me was her apologising to her mom and not throwing a tantrum. Usually juvenile geniuses like her (Ken is the prime example) would begin to develop an ego and start treating others like dirt. Yes, she likes to show off but that doesn't count. I meant visibly jeering at others for being below her.

I'd like to get started on stereotypes. This story has tons of them. The proud father, the people who don't believe her, the annoying little brother, the fake friend who leeches on the protagonist and slowly tries to corrupt her, the vain drama chick who is the bully, the hot dude who the protagonist has a crush on that makes her lose her composure... It's hard not to notice them. They stand out like a bad line from a poorly written, critically panned high school movie. Don't get me wrong, the execution of the chapter and plot is great but man, I can't ignore the clichés.

Well, it's an overall good start to what seems will be an interesting story. I'll read the next chapter soon, so stay tuned!

P.s. Could you please review my own stories as well? Hope you can return the favour :) I'd appreciate the feedback

Meh, I've got time to read through this at full speed :P I love the consequence of Creepy Ted and can't wait to see how it develops. I love Phillipe. Yvonne is going a little bit crazy. I loved the ending but I'm worried Yvonne is going to do something to Amanda. Possibly even reveal her identity.

It's been a while again, but I'm excited to be back. I like how the focus of the story seems to be the characters and not the plot. I quite liked the Tommy and Christine bit, it reminded me of a set up to a murder mystery. I laughed at the bathtime antics, especially a lot of the speech and imagery. I love the speech. I think the person outside is definitely one of Amanda's bullies. I love how it makes me think of Scooby Doo, even right down to Dogmon saying Jinkies.

Creepy Ted, urghh. Anyway, good chapter and I can't wait until I find time to read another chapter :D

It has been forever and a day since I last reviewed. I probably won't review them all straight away but I wanna get back into this story :D

I love the characterisation as always and how you deal with the issue of gender is hilarious.

"I want dumpster diving," she lied.

went*?

A great chapter that captured my attention as always and was great. No real qualms.