so I loved this story. I saw a few comment before I read it saying stuff about andromeda and how they didnt like it. I've never watched andromeda so I was a little hesitant to start this but decided to go ahead and give it a try and I'm so glad I did. this was wonderfully written. even only knowing the stargate side I feel like you've given enough information that I'm not completely lost on the andromeda side of things. I cant wait to see what comes next in book 2 thanks for sharing this

I liked the language translation you had. Making the Gate sytem pick up languages during transits was very creative. But I have been reading your other stories where you tie this to the BSG universe. When did a Colonial use the Gate? That would explain how they could understand each other.

This is a very good storie and I am enjoying it.

Hey, it's me, CGH57,

I couldn't post this under my account due to the one review per chapter rule, so consider this part 2 of my review.

Now this is the part I really didn’t like – not the rest of the chapter, but just one paragraph in particular – ZPM’s. ZPM’s and the mechanics of their creation. I just didn’t like it. And I am going to restrain myself and leave it at that.

With the shipyards and the factories, however, I would have personally waited until after he lifted the time dilation field on Eden. Otherwise, as you stated, if someone came along and discovered them, it may not have ended well. And even without the control crystals, an alien race may have figured out a work around. But if you waited until after he lifted the time dilation field, you could have had Liam and the Edenians working toward building the shipyards and the other facilities which would be required as their joint ventures moved forward.

The Edenian introduction, however, was good and set up well with the Edenians fully aware as to who Liam was and moving forward quickly to set their plans into motion. However, a bit move cultural development could have been included. It was just a bit bare for my mind. I mean, he brings them over from Pegasus and them their population increases to fifty million in about a hundred years? But, other than that, I could see what you were trying to do, so I won’t ramble on any further there.

And as far as the Aurora Class Warships are concerned, they do have one other armament – Pulse Cannons. During the battle of Asuras, you can see one of Asuran warships firing upon and heavily damaging a Wraith Hive.

And goodbye Repli-Carter.

You handled the Genii incursion well. I too would have left a few breadcrumbs for the Atlantis Expedition to pick up on in order to discover the Edenian presence/ assistance.

Now, having read all of your stories, the only bit I would have changed would have been Liam’s ship. Being one of his own design with the strongest shields and weapons and armour is all well said and done, but building it would have required engineers and mechanics, and most importantly, a shipyard – which, according to the flow of your story so far, would have happened in Pegasus.

I would have personally swapped this out in favour of a modified Aurora Class Warship, with the VI and the modified shields and armour etc….

Nonetheless, the Senari engagement was very good. And I do love reading over ship designs, so nice job there.

And that will be it for now.

Regards,

Chris

Finally, an Ancient willing to take a stand and clean up the mess left behind by the others of his race. And I suppose given that he has descended, he cannot use any of the ascended knowledge he gained to his advantage.
However, much of what you have written regarding how and why he descended is a bit confusing. I mean, you state that he ascended five million years ago, and then he decided it was time for a change, so he descended. What year did he descend, because I can only guess as to 10,000 years ago as you said that when the war with the Wraith started, he didn’t feel safe going into a stasis chamber. Or did I miss something?
And yes, vertically standing stasis chambers? Who on Earth thought that was a good idea?
And just how old is Liam? Surely, he would be held to the same limitations as the other stasis chambers used by the other Ancients/Lanteans. I mean, as we have seen with the crew of the Aurora, after 10,000 years in one of those things it only slows down the metabolic rate of the individual inside the pod. Or is this a different variation of the stasis pods? Or perhaps, could it have been due to his advanced mental abilities that he was able to stave off the ageing process which afflicted everyone else, because we have seen such an instance before. I mean, in the episode ‘Frozen’, we learned that Aiyana survived several thousands of years encased in ice, and that it was only due to her advanced mental abilities that she survived.
But anyway, the satellite project is a great idea. I would imagine an observational platform would have been the most likely intended application for them. Perhaps even serving as a way of observing how other races in their respective galaxies would have utilised them upon discovery – kind of like a grand experiment of some kind. I mean, with the Ancient plague wiping out the Ancients in the Milky Way, it may have brought the experiment to a halt, perhaps with humans from Earth being the intended ‘guinea pigs’, if you will.
This can even be further supported by what the Ancient ‘Melia’ says during the hologram recording from the first episode of ‘Stargate Atlantis’ – ‘… in the hope of spreading new life in a galaxy where there appeared to be none. Soon, the new life grew, and prospered. Here, we built a system of Stargates, so that fledgling civilisations could travel between them the stars, exchange knowledge and friendship. In time, a thousand worlds bore the fruit of life in this form.’.
But this system would provide a crucial point of intelligence gathering, so good job there.
And yes, the Daedalus class has horrible offensive capabilities. As the show progressed, I was hoping for Area 51 to have at least reverse engineered a plasma cannon by season seven at the earliest. But I suppose that would have taken all the fun out of it.
But anyway, Liam to the rescue.
‘Oh, she’s pissed, and worst of all, she’s had ten thousand years to prepare for this reunion. I’m clearly at a disadvantage here.’ – That genuinely made me laugh. Well, the entire exchange with his wife, Aenea, in fact.
And in all fairness, Liam hasn’t done anything wrong – that’s if we assume that he has not retained any of the knowledge he learned as an ancient – so the Others should not be angry with him.
However, Carter swearing in that fashion was completely out of character for me, and felt rather unnecessary. But, advancing Earth’s tech-base for the story which is yet to come is good so far, and entirely plausible given that Liam is an Ancient. He would have the intellect and knowledge to design and implement the upgrades for Earth into viable designs which they can build themselves without requiring Ancient/ Asgard manufacturing capabilities.
And that will be it for the review of this chapter – at least for now. For the chapter is a rather long one, so I will be posting my reviews in parts. But anyway, the story is going along well so far, so good job.

Regards,

Chris

Well this story was a surprised. I was reading Stargate the Twelve Colonies and then I stumbled onto this one. This story flows very nicely. I am enjoying and it very much.

I am in the process of re-reading this EXCELLENT story and had an interesting thought...in chapter 7 where Liam drops the Aschen gate in space before entering hyperspace ...where the Aschen could probably recover it, why not drop it off in hyperspace instead? As the Aschen don't seem able to use the gates, Gating to hyperspace should be an interesting for any Prior...hehehe

I no longer enjoy this story.

From the start I had no interest in the Andromeda storyline, and with more and more focus on it, it became tedious to read.

He should focus on one Galaxy at a time, it seems he has the ability to be everywhere when the plot calls for it, but at the same time, be incapable to be anywhere other times. Also his ability to produce ships varies, depending on what the plot requires.

With a Time Dialation device, he could throw one up around a Solar System, and produce as many ZPMs as he needs. Just set a Time Dialation field up around a solar system, build the required infrastructure to produce ZPMs and Ships, start the building of ZPM/Ships, turn of the Time Dialation field, leave the field, set it to go on for 10 000 years inside the field, Profit.

It also seems like he interferes way too much for the Ascended to ignore, but thats just my opinion.

Love the tec there has been some debate on how big the 304s are but I can get behind 325m. Some I've talked with say 650m and that's to big I fill.

I really enjoyed this. I was trying to do my own story but now I fear that I can't. Your doing a great job here with the fleets of ships that was were I want to take it. Loved the Raptors I wrote something like them to even with beaming you would need a drop ship. Great job. I just wish that I would have found these sooner.

OK YOU HAD ME THERE GOOD SPIN.

If I was Jack I would in ask to be notified first before they beam me up. I'm liking it so for though I fill that the Aschen would of spread out in there own solar system. they did say something like that in there 2010 ep. But that may have been after you started your spin. It get a little mixed up in my head. lol
Nice work though looks like I still have some more reading ahead of me.

Ok I'm guessing yo are rewriting seasons 8-10 of SG1 and most all of Atlantis.

This is quit a read. I'm enjoying it very much. Liking the new twist on it.

P90 isn't a rifle, dude.
A bullet with tungsten would make it more AP and reduces stopping power due to overpenetration.
Try either timed detonation hollowpoint AP using crystal electronics naquadah power and explosive tip or go fully dumb with kinetic impactors.

The actual limiting factor of motorized ground vehicles is fuel economy, and using the same rare fuel in your tanks as the starships is not a good idea. It's like Liam putting ZPMs into all his ships just because it's better.

The Terran have other technologies that they can use to power their ground vehicles, make some up from the Asgard, surely there is an electrical storage medium competitive with jet fuel that can then push instantaneous power and take up very little space and just needs charge.

10 light seconds is farther than the distance between the earth and the moon btw, so there is no way that the O'neill class was even remotely in weapons range of the Defiant or her persuers.