Amazing

Wow... I mean WOW WOW WOOW that was soooooooo GREAT make more LOK fanfiction PLEEEAASSEE

Whoo! Great ending! Great way to wrap some loose ends up and still keep the tension!

incredible chapter. honestly your best one yet. this is nothing less than the best fight story ive seen in a long time, the romance at the end was nothing short of breathtaking, and the new criminal. intense. ill be here to read every story.

amon got a sexy voice :P

This is amazing. The only problem I could see is that you didn't put any periods in your quotations, but that's a small issue.

I'm not a huge Makorra fan, myself, but this story was still pretty awesome. Good work!

Another great one, you are one of the best writers I have ever seen on here. I know something that could make you even better though.

A beta reader.

It is just a suggestion, you can take it, wad it up into a little paper ball, and toss it away forever into a tiny tin trash can and forget the words and completly wipe them away from your mind if you want to.

But, if you take my words into consideration, I am willing to help. I seen just a few typos in your story that could be fixed. Nothing big.

Great discription, I love how well writen this is.

Again, you are one of the best writers I have seen on here.

Keep up your awesome work!

-Storm

Omg. I looove this. Makorra is so cuuute3

Omg. I looove this. Makorra is so cuuute3

This is an amazing piece of writing! You definitly have a skill for writing action/fighting scenes! I absolutely love this and I hope you continue it!

This is GREAT! Make more please!