I feel like you're missing so much character depth. You never gave an inner monologue or a description of Bella's thoughts about her abusive situation, her daughter, her family's murder, her change... None of it. It's like she just keeps rolling with the punches, relatively unfazed by it all. There's no growth at all. She didn't even fight against her abusive situation or being forced to marry, despite being so decisive, independent and fierce. I'm honestly not fond of the random island adventure that took up like 2 chapters and had no actual purpose whatsoever. The magical creatures overload is a bit much, along with the tons of rules to explain things. You kept switching between the name Dolores and Dorothy, which was pretty annoying, and again, what was up with this random and underdeveloped character? Lykans still haven't even been explained. I don't understand why Bella needs to interfere at all with the history of the Cullens, since the family will come together without her even there, so why is this concept worth exploring? The amount of Nephilims seems ridiculously high considering Bella's parents were so limited in picking a husband for her. A 50/50 ratio on that island made no sense. It was also so cliché that Bella was invisible overhearing the men talk about catching and using her, which honestly had no explanation either. I enjoy the ideas you present, but the execution is very poor.

very good, I loved

How does she survive the hanging?!

Wow...I like That you have put so much thought and research into the story. I'd suggest rate the story complete.

Is it a Phoenix?!

So much weight, on such tiny shoulders !

You have me hooked!

Here comes Carlisle.

Daughter of Destruction, indeed. You have an exceptional writing skill.

So her journey begins...

It has a very promising start!

This was such a beautiful story my only problem was that it ended lol. You have such an amazing gift of writing and storytelling. I thank you for sharing this with us.

I loved this story. It is really good.

so it's complete? Sine you never marked it complete

oh no!