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But then I had a filled me with confusion.
. but then I had a thought that filled.?
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Yooooo cyclonis now knows bout her eyes changing colors :O
This was a super short and sweet one! Awesome!
(also that end note, starling won. Shocker ncbzbfjsjfjs mood)

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-fantasy scene o.o- keeping a silent as I can.
. as silent.

-doves awake- one the one hand.
. on the one.
I my feelings begin to contradict.
. my feelings.

-where is piper?- piper has taken the libary of you shower.
. your shower.

-you live here with your grandfather?- thought weather it be uncomfortable or not, I couldn't tell, thought I could tell there was.
. though whether.. though I could tell.
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Only just realised this sites format is super weird that it deletes my double -, smh
I agree! This chapter is p damn perfect!
Also oop spicy scene to start off on! LOVED the girl talk cy had bout love 3
Awesome job!

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-this feels so rightwere both girls.
. we're.
I realized that it not just loving someone... It's being love:
. that it's not. (THIS LINE AAAAAH! So soft3)
they're heart, a part of they're life.
. theirtheir.!

-crash landing!open my eyes, only to me met with two
. only to be met.
(BRO, this! Whole scene too! So soft I can FEEL the cute new relationship tension stuff!)

-we have a fainterI want to be a part of you life.
. your life.
I know that the storm hawks are a large part of you life.
. your life.
x2! :0

-she had a year to thinkthat you procreated my feelings.
. reciprocated my feelings.?
procreated is like, making or doing the sex
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Maaaan this was your first time writing a couple? Bruh you didn't half knock it right outta the park! Your like- okay so like these whole past couple of chapters? Where you proper try to write the hints of a crush (dropping those signals ALL over the place) and then the reveal (dat tension doe) and all the feelings and now this! Master cyclonis is her gf! Astounding!

Honestly bro I couldn't even give tips bc what you got here is already SO good. I can only applaude the awesome work especially for a first time try!? Did not expect that with all this TALENT you laying down

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-beginning of acceptanceIf I was was thinking a bit more
. double was!.
-First kissI didn't go any farther then just pressing my lips to hers.
. further.

-cook this bikenon the less. "yes, but it would have to a relatively light heat,"
. none the less.. have to have a relatively.

-blast off!with a twist the handle,
. with a twist of the handle.
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AAAAAAAAA
Yea! Cyclonis' POV is awesomeAmazing chapter so many good feels!

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-she's self taughtI felt my hard beating faster.
. heart.
Piper put here hand on my shoulder.
. her hand.
"Lark, your my friend."
."you're"?.

-presentI was back in that cave. Which was know lit
. was now lit.
Cyclonis wobbled a bit where she sat. The she started to fall to the side.
.a bit were she sat. Then she stated to fall.
I fight she was losing.
.A fight.
I gently pulled on cyclonis' by the shoulders,
. pulled on cyclonis by the?
pulled on cyclonis' shoulders?.
he eyes were just slits between.
. her eyes.
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BRO so awesome! Also ONLY just noticed that cyclonis mum is a lil bit sus huh? She would certainly be close enough to cyclonis and the Royal family, could be a mage, got all the knowledge right there too to do that VERY tricky skill of altering/erasing memories!IF, it is her, allllll this stuffs been set up so awesomely! Omg. Honestly the memory being messed up thingy with cyclonis is super dope and intriguing 3 and the physical effects of headaches and eye color change/changing is also super cool.

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-Poured her heart outFor the life of me i didn't no what to say.
. didnt know.
-I was master cyclonisthough no by my own choice.
. not by my.
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Whoooooa! This is all very good, the tension, the truth, she do be master cyclonis afterall! Love how the words from the dream get brought back. I love the ending you choose, it just makes the next one so exciting. Also very nice on having piper still be so wary of that crystal.

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-Oopanything particular reason you like this person?"
."Anything particular you like about this person"?
"any particular reason you like this person?".
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That DREAM DOE.
Love how she faints at the end lmaooo
Adore this chap!

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I was right when thought I would need cyclonis' help.
. when I thought I would.

-switchblade at the lakeHold the dead crystal
. holding.
without a a crystal to power it
. Double a'a!.

-the diveI could see all the to every corner of the lake
.I could see all the [blank blank] to every corner of the lake.?
I could see to every corner of the lake.?.

-caught in the actshe was starring at me.
. staring.
She's sorry for starring? So she really was starring at my...
. staring. again sksk

-sleepHow she's held me tight.
. how she held me.? How it felt when she?
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This is also another fav to see them working together and the obv dive scene, seeing more of the OBVIOUS crush :0
Cyclonis is so cute and flustered and you can relate HARD to her endeavours here ahdjjafhjsdhssndoak

Mmmm yes the gay panic waking up scene,,,,,, VERY NICE 3333333333

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-waking upconciseness came back slowly.
. consciousness.
Master cyclonis demonic weapon.
. master cyclonis'? Cyclonises?. I think the first ones more right lmao

(she called her HONEY AAA. So cute! Always love that partfinding sheltercyclonis fallowed my arm.
. followed.
A few seconds latter came a thunderous boom.
. later.

-comfortedthis didn't fell real. Then, cyclonis buried her head in my chest.
. feel real.
Atleast, no the on I had always seen her as.
. not the one I had always seen her as.
"it's alright, honey. Your okay..."
. you're. Wjshdjsdjsk
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MAN. The fluff!? Fantastic! Absolutely adorable! I-
mmmm *yes*! All the YES to this chapter my guyThis is defo one of my top chapters in this fic frfr no doubt about it. Its just- well I'm not really good with my words but the atmosphere? you just capture the setting and characters and feelings v wellPiper summing the end of her day up with "well, there was no other way to put it; I was cuddling (ahdjjdjsk) with Master Cyclonis while she was asleep." amazing XD

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-Piper is too nice for her own goodhey.I tries to keep my voice strong and steady.
.I try to. ?
I was relived that she wasn't shaking anymore.
. relieved.
-my TITLE piper, I have a birthright TITLEI see know harm in doing so."
. no harm.

-attack of the blood crowshe gave me a look that was a ix anger and desperation.
. that was a mix of anger and desperation.?
Half it body buried into the tempest.
. half it's body.
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Bruh I am blown away by how awesome this chapter is! Cyclonis' eye color fluctuations! Superb! The mystery! And yea! What ARE the murk raiders doing all the way out here? What is their business? is it to do with dark ace? TRAITOR/S within cyclonia!? We don't know! But boy oh boy is it exciting!

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-why cyclonis?Apparently she she took my question to mean the first
. double she's!.
This was couldn't be real. This was some kind of trick.
. This couldn't be real.?
There was no way how someone as evil and manipulative
. There was no way someone as evil.?
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Amazing! AAAAA I love how you can just SEE smth is wrong with cyclonis even this earlier on but you have no way of knowing what on earth is going on! and you can still low-key pass it of as her just being uber conflicted bout it all!

accidently clicks the send button smh,
You had me shoot down.
."shot down".
I could feel he physically tearing through my mind.
. could feel her.
:D
Maaaan! The hype! Is real!

Nice! I just wanted to point out a couple grammar fucky wuckys I noticed lmaopiper crashed-we're luck to have found this one.
. We're lucky.

-piper captured-Snipe literally through me into a holding cell.
. threw me. (I hate this I do it all the time myself, often it was in the middle of exams haxjksdjsk)
About an hour latter.
. later.

-meeting the masteryou, majesty"
."your majesty"?
The person in charge off the greatest threat ever
. in charge of.
(only thing for her (cyclonis) to focus on. )
You had my shoot down.

Oh baby I'M BACK. imma be reading this againAlso omg! You write "Linked in love and life", in rwby!? So Cool! One of my best friends LOVES and I mean absolutely ADORES that fic _
And its just really cool knowing that I've loved the hecky outta you and your writing with "The strength in Weakness" since... Hmm omg 2014? Sweet Mary its been a time and finding out my friend loves your writing too thru a different work! So awesome.
Hope you're doing oka bro! Staying safe and all that jazz!