Learn what a run-on sentence is. Stop writing them. Use a period. Thank you.

i'd be all like "...oh damn..."

Hehe, "Bang." Imagine if Sakura actually got killed that way. Quite an anti-climatic way to go, huh?

:]]]] hahaha it fills like this is more of a filler chappie :P

xD sasuke being a buttface :]

Great job man :D

Dun dun dun! I really like the plot of this story so please update soon! I want to see what happens next!

yaaaaay 3 update soon 3 hehe love it :]

Hmm... I wonder what happens but please continue.

more please

You make mistakes on a regular basis, those which can be remedied by simply re-reading what you've wrote and double-checking to make sure it makes sense. That's a basic improvement that can be made, and it's kinda a foundation so you should already be all over that.

Good luck for your future writing!

Well that's quite a climatic way to kick off a story. Too bad that you make some mistakes like 'she tried to say realising me but was interrupted by Kakashi' but they can be smoothed over at a later date if a sh*t was really given about your story writing.

I don't pretty up the truth.

sorry guys I just realized I forgot to put the word strength after inhuman sorry! -_-'

Good job man! I have a question, what is Sakura's inhuman? Please update soon!

:]]]]]]] i like!1 :DD moaaarrrrr xD

i love you :3

Great job man, Sakura really didn't make much progress huh? Can't wait to see the next chapter :)