Really! Green bean and what the hell qeen hair wet
Did you run out of name or what didn't have the time
Sorry I can't help laughing at them

I love Hair Wet as a villian...something about a woman in power! I knew she'd be angry at Cow Fire for mating with a Sailor Scout. I'm surprised she didn't ask her minions to attack him directly!

Here's your first one ;-)

It was cool to meet the other Scouts, and Cow Fire mating with Venus was a great twist. I wonder what Hair Wet is going to make of all this...

Can't wait for Chapter 9!

update soon

It was interesting getting into the heads of the nag a verse monsters. The relationship between Hair Wet and Cow Fire is intriguing. He sounds like he might have another agenda that Hair Wet doesn't know about. That could cause big problems later.

And who doesn't love Emmett teasing Edward? LOL! I know he does it out of love, but Edward's reactions are always so funny :)

CHARLIE! He is the best. I was so glad that Bella already knew Edward was watching her sleep because it would have been REALLY BAD if Charlie found out that she didn't.

I also LOLOLOLOL'd when Bella called him a disco ball for sparkling in the sun. HAHAHAHA! Edward is still the most amazing vampire ever, but it is kind of funny that his skin sparkles in sunlight.

Love that all the Cullen women are Sailor Scouts now. I wonder if this means that Rose and Bella will always get along. Hmmm...

When Bella turned into Sailor Moon because she woke up to Edward in her room, that was soooo funny! And his reaction was priceless: "Aren't you overreacting just a little to my presence in your room?" LOLOL!

And there's nothing better than blunt, caring Father Charlie Swan. He is so great.

Great chapter, May!

What I loved about this chapter was the fact that Bella and Edward started off by putting everything out there in the open. "So no secrets now." That was so romantic!

And I wonder if Rose is going to get over herself sometime in the future. We'll see...

Sorry, I forgot to review this before...

I LOVED this chapter! It was so funny listening to how the Cullens reacted to the news that Edward and Bella were going to be mates. My favorite line was "Jasper do not worry ,I will not make her my meal. It is like Alice said. She is my mate..." I thought that was great.

And I loved the conversation with Renee, the way Charlie was smirking at her. I can't wait to see what happens when Bella and Edward actually have a conversation!

Really good

I always love sailor moon and I love the way you crossed over it with twilight.

Hey may!

Above all, I admire your courage to put your writing out there. It is TOUGH to share your work and subject yourself to other people's opinions even without dyslexia as an additional challenge. So YOU ROCK for having the guts to do it!

I don't know anything "Sailor Moon" other than the fact that one of my younger cousins loved the cartoon as a little girl. So may I suggest a little bit of explanation about what it means to be a Sailor Moon, just so that people who are unfamiliar with that world can still enjoy your story.

For example, the phone call from Renee suggests that becoming Sailor Moon is a big responsibility, so it would be helpful to know why. Maybe that would also explain why Bella knows that the Cullens are vampires and was glad to be safe from them when the day was over.

You say that you have a Beta already, and I'd like to offer my help as well. I'm a stay-at-home Mom with a degree in English who likes to help people who are passionate about writing. So if you're interested in another set of eyes or someone to help you plot and figure out where you want to take things, let me know!

(And I hope that whoever wrote that OBNOXIOUS review hasn't soured you on finishing your story. Because that would really be a shame)

:)

Denise

(ladylibre)

ps - Thanks for ALL your support of my story, Serenity's Prayer. Your reviews make me smile every time I read them!

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