Damn..excellent work

Loved the updates!

But, if Garrus had no training in basic mathematics, how come he's so good at calibrating?

I can't believe there aren't more people reading this! I love this story; it's so in-depth and exciting and funny. Your characters are alive and interesting, it'll be fun to watch them develop.
Is that young Quarian girl going to make a later appearance? She really tugged at the heartstrings, you know?
And those journals or codexes you have at the beginning of the chapters are awesome! Don't get rid of those.
Keep up the good work!

Just one word: Awesome!
Couldn't stop to read 31 chapters at once :)

Ahahahahaha!Liara was awesome!ahahahahah!

Well written story with the personality of the team kept in character. The interaction between them was well portrayed and I could easily imagine such behaviour from Tali, EDI or Garrus under the circumstances you placed them in.

I have only read the first three chapters, but will continue to enjoy the lecture at a later date.

Keep up the good work.

That's gonna hurt...

Excellent work as always

Enters the thief

Interesting...only one thing stood out. CDR Shepard told ADM Anderson that he had never been to London. "I've never been to London, maybe when this is all over you can show me around". I may be a little off on the quote but that was the general idea.

I just read thisfrom beginning to end and I must say I enjoyed the lot of it. Despite a few contradictions to the storyline of the game it all was paltry in comparisson to the level of ingenuity and creativity you portrayed. I am very interested to read the sequel if you plan to write one. I haven't looked into your bio to see what else you have written as I found this in the basic search engine. Again I must say I loved this and I hope your next project continues the same level of competance and artistic vision.
-Blackbox Inc.

It was really an awful idea to read this chapter while listening to the "We Are Free" from the Gladiator soundtrack. You got me good though, I have tissues.

First, I have to say that you should have begin the story before that Sheppard "wake up", for example in the moment before he was hit with the laser blast of the Reaper Harbinger.

Hell, you could have destroyed that beast and change the end of the game.

I was really disappointed with the end of the game, because let face it, the three ending are the same, are little changes between them but they really dont change anything, and I am really angry all the plot holes and deus ex machina that have, and it seem that they want us to pay to see the real ending, they should rot in hell.

fantastic!

10/10

i only have one or two problems and there really small seem as you asked for feed back:

Garrus dad survives you tells you

Liara wouldnt give up been the broker it's 'a dream job' for her

hope to see missed out characters like Jacob,Javik and ashley/Kaiden(i hated ash just saying)editd in or in new stories

and my last whiny complaint why couldnt you write for bioware why come on the worst things about your story is its not on the game!I hope your next story finds a good mix of old and new characters as the only old friend on the sr3 is liara no joker no kaiden?