Amazing work! Brilliant writing style!

Keep up the great ideas! :)

It was really interesting! I really liked seeing things from Lillie and Pique's POV, it felt like research because they will both be very involved in fan fiction that I am currently writing.

I really like all the feeling analysis, things that go psychologically in depth really interest me! That's one of the millions of things I adore about this anime.

It was pretty light on the Fahiru, so to speak, but what was there was enjoyable and well done. As far as Fahiru goes, I love it so much that I will be satisfied with the slightest hint of their feelings towards each other. They really are the greatest couple in anime history, right up there with Kenshin and Kaoru.

I was a little confused about what Claire(that's how they pronounce it in Japanese, so that's what I'm calling her!) was trying to accomplish. Was she just trying to leave Ahiru sad and friendless? I did like the description of how much Ahiru hurts for Claire. It was very in character. In fact, one of the only problems wad Ahiru seemed a little selfish in this.

Over all, it was very good. I liked it very much. -

Sooooooo cute!

But couldn't Fakir kiss Ahiru in order to save her.

I'm not jugding! I love your story; I just thought it'd be cuter.

This is really good

Nice