Really enjoyed this story! Fantastic writing and characterization!

That was great. I'm glad that Tommy was there to help her out. Who knew that Tommy would feel guilty about what he had done to her. I like the idea of Doc wearing an apron. Are you planning on writing any other stories?

Great story; I really like Tommy being all remorseful for stabbing Rebecca. Which he should, after all! I like how protective he is of her. I wouldn't mind seeing more along this vein... ;)

Wonderful! I can totally imagine this happening, with Doc having something at his store, Rebecca going in alone (which I don't think Hasuer would be too pleased about, though he doesn't follow protocol either). I like the Tommy touch. I think his actions in this fit him rather well. I noticed a few grammar mistakes, but overall very good!

Wow another great story! I love the way you write and how you describe everything. It makes it very easy to imagine everything in my mind to hear the the old wood make noise as she walks through the warehouse.

I also liked the interaction between Tommy and Rebecca even though she didn't know everything he said to her.

My only advice for you is maybe change the ratings of your store. You have it rated as M but I don't think that rating is necessary. Its definatly a T for sure but not M. Plus you might get more views and reviews if you lower the rating. I know when I come on the site and look at stories the site automatically filters out any store rated M I have to do a seprate search to allow those stories to pop up. I know other's who read Alcatraz stories will love yours. You do such an amazing job writing them. I'm adding you to my author alerts I can't wait to see what you come up with next.