I love this so so so so much! Good writing! xx

I don't give a fuck what other people are saying. This story is nice and well written and it doesn't sound like a little kid wrote it. I think it's very nice and that you should continue it.

Bad fic stuff. Sorry, despite a lot of the character stuff being good, the plot has them acting with all of the social and societal graces of 13 year olds. I'm a feminist and I don't think men are quite that... blunt. Thanks for trying though. The angsty parts were working... its sort of a rush to get the payoff in the plotting, though.

It's too soon in regards to believable pacing, but you have a lot of the mannerism and dialog "right."

The kiss and I'm in love stuff was a bit "bad fic" in that it is a rush for one day of knowing another person. It could have been a hug or a caress on the cheek thing - but the rest of the story is working.

Okay. Good establish on the age. 22 is still considered young - college grad age - its just in the show he probably almost had his 3rd PHd at 20 - going to the FBI academy probably shortly after turning 21. So there's a contrast. I like how you have Hotch saying, things like I'm a profiler and I can use his mind, which help explain his actions in the first chapter. That, and in this chapter you show that he feels that the young man is unjustly incarcerated and wants to save him from that.

Good note on the "has been abused" bit, as well as picking up body language and values from his mom isn't the same thing as actually being paranoid or schizophrenic. I have a big pete peeve when people say its a form of Asperger's or something on the autism spectrum.

I'd like to see a qualification of how old Reid is in this story, but meanwhile great establish that he was checked in to the hospital to warehouse him not because he had any significant problems. Hotch seems a little over eager, it could be a one time thing. Curious to see how this plays out of if Reid in this universe has any correspondence degrees. Obviously the drug use benched him from his full potential at the time.

Poor Spencer!

Hotch is very OOC sometime (chuckle), but the story is beautiful.

Where do I begin with this? The good: congrats on writing nearly 50,000 words and 34 chapters. The ability to write, plot and see a story through is commendable and something that doesn't happen nearly often enough. You have a great premise as well.

The bad: Your characterization is superficial and mostly OOC at best, but that can be overlooked in light of other problems. The reason that Spencer stayed at Bennington and the legalities of keeping him there are completely unrealistic and more than that, illegal. There was no well-meaning nurses and doctors, what was done to Spencer keeping him there is enough to warrant a full investigation from the FBI now that they know and have that place shut down!

The biggest problem that I have with your story is summed up in a sentence you wrote in chapter 33, "In the week we've been together, I cured him of bulimia, anorexia, got him to be more self-confident and forget his horrible past, and be comfortable with who he is." Not only is this unrealistic and untenable, it is dismissive of these things as mental illnesses. It shows a complete lack of understanding, of empathy and of even basic wikipedia research. You should be ashamed of how you have presented these illnesses and rectify your ignorance of them immediately. You do this throughout the story in regards to physical, sexual, and drug abuse and the effects of it both in the long and short term.

You're a decent writer. Keep practicing, but stay away from writing about things you clearly cannot comprehend. And take this down. It's embarrassing to you and insulting to everyone else.

What a spectacular ending!loved it!

LOL, Have barely ever read fics where Aaron and Diana ever talk together.

LOL, another fantastic chappy!

That even affected me personally!