Your the best writte I have ever known. please some more oneshots . I am waiting

Update plz xxx

WHAT THE HELL

I really loved your story idea and the way you wrote it. To have Riven fool Musa at the end as a sort of pay back was great. Good story :)

Great job! I love how you used the guys to help her that made it all the more hilarious! I was laughing sooooooo hard about the rumour Riven spread about Nabu! LOL

holy holy heart attacks! Yikes! Love it though ;D keep it up

Late again! But this was...so freakin cute! I can't...*faints*

Nice!

You are a really talented writer and i loved this Oneshot

ADORABLE! :D

Firstly, I apologize for not replying in ages (I'll try to reply to your PM as soon as possible) and not reading this one-shot of yours earlier. I have been super busy with school, and on top of that all I got sick during the exam week. Anyhow, it feels so good to be back reading stories on ff. Especially yours.

I thought the idea of this one-shot was great! I didn't think the speech was OOC at all, but some of the characters' actions might have been. I'd have pictured Riven to be more grumpy and cocky during the picnic, considering that this one-shot could have taken a place in the season one. Also, I don't see why Musa would have wanted to trick Riven into thinking she had liked him and then saying she hadn't. Other than that, I don't think anything else was OOC in my opinion. The one-shot was great: it was different from others and it had a happy ending! Yeah, I'm a sucker for happy endings. Oh, and this was probably the first April Fool's related story I have ever read in my life.

Honestly, I thought the writing was great, but there were some minor mistakes in dialogue punctuating and a couple of text parts would have been better off with spaces. Instead of "..." He greeted, "..." He whispered, and "..." He said, there should be comma instead of punctuation mark, and therefore "he's" can't be capitalized.

E.g. "You're beautiful," he whispered all of a sudden.

I guess that's the only critique you'll get from me as I'm not the best with grammar and stuff. Keep up with the marvelous job!

PS. Waiting forward reading the next chapter of "Destiny's Game"!

- Eve

Aww. Too cute. ;) Everything about htis, I would never ever be able to pull these kinds of ficlet's off, it's just too much creativity for me. xD As far as constructive critisim goes... you don't need it from me as I am horrible with English.

wow haha dat wat funny! dang riven sure can pull sum prank! and wat musa did was a bit too much, at least da ending was happy! cus i LOVE happy endings! im such a sucker for them! anyways loved da story! hope to c more of your work! especially i wanna know wat happens in "Destiny's Game"! update wen you can!(:

lots of love,

-AngelCutie ChildAtHeart

Omg so sweet! I was like that's cruel but I love the ending! And lol at Riven's prank on Nabu, that was pure genius! Lol at Timmy too! Omg I love your stories! But this was amazing! Can't wait for more updates! Loved it!

PebsXD