Aww a first kiss...how romantic!

Aww thats so cute!

OMG I LOVE IT AND I NEED TO KNOW MORE PLEASE BE TYPING RIGHT NOW.
AND BRADIN..LOVEEE IT

Oh no! This story is so sad! :'( At least he found his phone though!

Aww. It's sad that she's getting picked on now that Keith is gone and that defiantly was a cliffhanger!

Aww. I loved the last sentence!

This is a cute story so far!

YOU HAVE GOT TO BE KIDDING ME! IS SHE SICK? DID SHE DIE? OH MY GOODNESS, GIRL UPDATE SOON!

Super cute chapter; making them longer would make the story. Truthfully, that, and just a tad more detail, and it would be perfectttt. You definitely have a writing talent, and a knack for writing emotions and how the characters feel. I'd love to see what you could do with a Keith/Natalie story! :D

Awesome start to entering the Fanfiction world.

Blessings,

Sarah

AWE SO CUTE SO FAR I LOVE IT OMG YOU DID SO CUTE WITH ADDING HIS FAV COLOR, THE MAKINGS OF A GREAT AUTHOR TO BE ADDING IN DETAILS TO MAKE THE CHARACTER COME TO LIFEEEEE. (: Anyways, now that all that hype is over, LOL. Seriously, Jas, you did WONDERFUL, and I am so proud of you for your work on your first ever Fanfic! Congrats, girly! *Throws party* This is a huge step, you always remember your first story! I remember my first Keith story..I actually started writing because I was annoyed with my teacher, so you can tell why Keith is s sadistic in the first chapter of A Little Chemistry, bahah. Anyways, once again, wonderful, and I cannot WAIT for chapter two. Pleeeeease update soon. (Oh yes, it is that time in your life in which your badgered everyday of your life for updates.) Truly, welcome to FF my friend, welcome. (;

God Bless!

You're awesome friend who loves Keith justtt as much as you dooo,

Sarah(;