I love this. The only thing that's bothering me is the switch to first person in the middle of the chapter. If you are going to write a story, you must choose which point of view you're going to use and stick with it throughout the story or else you will confuse your readers.

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awwwwwwwww

I'm glad that Sev & Lily started dating properly, and that Sev listened to Dumbledore's advice, and that Lily's affections for him grew :) It was a nice twist that you showed that Severus' 'friends' were to blame not the Marauders. I enjoyed reading your story!

Haha that's a brilliant prank and it looks like the Marauders really are deceived! I'm sure Severus is really enjoying it but hoping that it reflects something more... we'll just have to see how Lily actually feels for him, apart from wanting him back as her best friend. She certainly detests James right now! Great idea with 'Snotter' as James' nickname and the letter, it was hilarious hearing them add stuff to the bottom that would make Lily scream. This story has been really fun to read so far :) I hope you've been enjoying mine, it'd be great to hear what you think!

WRITE IT!

I say that if you want to write it, write it. This idea has been done before (Hogwarts Lily transports to the future and meets Snape) but it's nice to see different ideas about it.

Few stories are completely original anyway so it would be nice to see your interpretation. I believe the reason for her time-travel is completely original though. A very interesting initiation.

Brilliant :D

This is my favorite chapter, actually, just thought u should knoww that prenn (;

HARRY SNAPE lol

but mac is my favorite (;

hoorrayy! severus is okay! (: is this the end? kind of abrupt...

interresting

make them kiss!

kiss kiss kiss!

lovies! (:

i'm usually pro jamesxlily but sevxlily is sooo cute too! lovee it! (:

Aw, good lily [pats her head] your being agood friend!