Hi like the story so far, but have notice a lot of grammar and spelling mistakes. Was wondering if you would like to have a beta/editor for it. Also their is the multiple of heir. There is the opposite of here. They’re is the contractions of they are. Please contact me or go up to where it says beta and look for one. Would be so much better if you get someone’s help.

Poor Nessie everything seems to be falling apart

This is such a cute story this is the third one that i have read like this I am almost finished with it i hope nothing 2 terrible happens

Emily baby is due on my birthday

2nd paragraph 4th sentence you made a typo and for some reason I can't stop laughing

meh

omg. i wuz just listening to this song when i read this chapter! thats funny(:

wow, this is a great story. Cant wait for the sequel. I really like how this is going.

ohh noo i hope she becomes a full vampire thought?!

OMG ...
im almost to tears

hahah those too chapter were great and i think that nessie and her friend should talk i mean i think there needs to be more friend drama in it :) with the one who doesnt know

Im not being mean or anything but you really need to work on your punctuation.

Awe so cute

The story is getting so ding dang good! And as you can tell, I've been watching my favorite tv show too much. But what is Nessie's birthday present? If I beg long enough will you tell me? After all, I am your best friend. ;) And if school doesn't get in the way too much, update soon please!

Ok, "Their at the cottage" is obviously "they are...", "there mine" is probably "they are mine" and "I could of stopped you" stands for ''could have stopped''
But what about "wouldn't of chose"(last chapter)? Where the heck did you get this ? I know there is "wouldn't have chosen", but this one is just...what does it mean?