I read a couple of paragraphs of your story, and it just seems... Well awkward to read. I'm not a very good author myself so I can't exactly tell you what i find wrong with it since I'm not very good with words... But this sentence in particular- "As he continued down the hall, he soon hears the door open" is a good example. Since your witting your story like this it should really be "as he CONTINUES down the hall" rather than "as he continued down the hall" You seem to have a well thought out plot going on, and I didn't really see any misspellings either. If you ask a friend to proofread your stories, you'll probably get alot of warm feedback. :)

Oh... oh wow... Just... wow...

This is amazing, you've gotten down EXACTLY what I would do if I was in that position, that's for darn sure! Lol~ I loved it! The anger to romance, details and the transformation that Henry had - awesome read. 3~