Ohhh myyyy

Nice. I'm glad it didnt turn into a full on orgy with penetration and the like

Meltdown would be a pretty cool code name

okay I know this is a really late review, but I just had to. Interesting take on Rahne's past... I just have to comment about how throughout the entire first chapter, the way Amara and Ray were interacting...! they're my otp (well like one of my XMEN EV. otps) and I think you did a great job expressing their relationship. it was nice to see a different view of Ray, instead of the usual hothead, immature person I read about in most fanfiction.

On the other point, about Rahne, I seriously think you did an awesome job! Keep writing, Kay?

Awesommmeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeweeeewwweweee u should make more using

interesting!

Yummylicious. Rahne just doesn't get enough love from the fandom, and certainly doesn't get enough action.

(_)... Um...good job... lol

You have background in this story which is good, I learned a bit about Rahne's past and the others don't know about her father, and everyone but Tabitha don't seem to know that Amara is a princess, if that's what you meant about Rahne's being confused about in the last chapter.

One thing though that kinda bothers me is the Jubilee and Tabitha attacking each other between the legs... I really don't think having that part was necessary. I think just having the girls hair singed and a few burned marks would have been better than having them attack each others groin, unless you were TRYING to or I don't know get some male readers to have a...turn on? IF you were then that's a little disturbing, and this is coming from a guy.

All in all 7/10

Yes...Terumi... you very *very* GRAPHIC (_)

Holy sexy k more pleassse :)

Rule 34! LOL!

please finish this story. It's good!

At the end, I was thinking ORGY!