i know this story is already done for so long but this fanfic give me a urge to comment it...ok i know im selfish...i have a main character syndrome...i like the story so far but im kinda dissapointed you dont give many cameo from the xxx holic or maybe non...but you give many cameo from other franchise its xxx holic reference is only the truth that amber is yuuko reincarnation which is good and bad...at the same time good because you reincarnate her (yuuko) bad because hm...well this opinion is my personal opinion...bad because you dont mention watanuki at all poor watanuki...like i say earlier i have mc syndrome and it kind of piss me off you dont include him through cameo or directly are you hating him...poor him that must keep the shop forever while waiting his master that got reincarnate but forget about him and really abandoning him like a trash...sorry if i offend you but like i say i have mc syndrome...if you feel offend well you free to put your protest at my pm...also why oh why you treat hideki unfairly let face it he's a normal character i agree also like minoru but you gave minoru cool power while hideki dont...also dont forget how strong he actually is remember how he alone pick chi up and bring her to the apartment...

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I'm not much for crossovers, but I've got to say, that this is one of the best fics I've read If not the best.

Your plot and characters are mesmerizing, and you have some serious writing talent I have never seen before. You have taken me, and locked me up in this fic, and I can never get out of it.

It's getting better and better! In this new chapter, the mystery increases: Chii has an "encounter of the third kind" with a strange "rabbit-girl" in the Motosuwa home (an alien from another universe or dimension?); while in the Kokubunji manor continues the fight between the duo Amber & Garrett and the invader Kupati & his evil "twin" female persocoms. I think it's implied there is some relation with "The Game" that was intriguingly alluded in the beginning of the chapter - involving many different universes or dimensions (by the way, I know little about xxxHolic and Negima!, however the spells conjured by Amber using any form of Latin reminded me the Harry Potter series!); and I also think there is any connection between the Kupari's book and the new "dark children's book" that Chii persuaded Hideki to buy (Chii making "puppy dog pout"? She's getting smartass, right?).
By the way, still on Amber and Garrett, it's very weird that "the Heiress of a high-end computer company" and her persocom (a male Chobit!) are able to use magic in battle! Although I remember anything about "magic pactio" (or similar) in one or another part of Negima manga - what implies that Amber and possibly her father (or her family) are magicians and not mere mortals.

This is very exciting and dynamic chapter, stuffed of mysteries. Rectifying, I think the "Diary Entries" refers to Garrett and Amber ("the girl")! I understand that Garrett (as he' s a persocom and a Chobit), he 's related to Chii/Elda (and Freya?), but why were Amber referring to Chii as "my Elda"?
Finally, the last scene of fight between Garrett & Amber and the mysterious Kupari and his evil persocoms (Miimii & Fiifii? Is it a joke? Any resemblance with "Chii" isn't a coincidence, right?) into Kokubunji Manor (poors Minoru and Yuzuki!) deserves a very good grade. So is this the big danger to threaten the American duo (and the Motosuwa couple), who seem to be more powerful than I thought! Crossover with other worlds (xxxHolic and Negima!) is in sight...

Now yes, for the first time, Amber & Garrett meet Chii! Apparently, she don't know (or remember) them (as Chii; however, could Elda [or Freya] remember them?), and they continue to role playing roles reversed towards Hideki and the others. It was funny to read about the two couples going out together to go the cinema - and although Chii's personality continues childish her is always evolving (like a smart child). By the other hand, Garrett seems to be a very special persocom, provided with an uncommon and state-of-the-art O.S. (after all, he's a type of Chobits that former was a human being, right?). And I guess the "Diary Entry 004" was registered by Garrett, and it had connection with Chii. I'm very anxious to know what is the danger involving the American duo and its conseuqences to Chii & Hideki.

It's hard to believe that this story is finally over. It's been more than 3 and a half years, and knowing that this would still occasionally get updates had become one of the reassuring patterns in my life. It's sad to know it's over, but I'm also glad for you. Your poetry is really good BTW.

As for the chapter itself, I liked the reference to Kotoko's Liberty program from Rebellion, although you know I still go with the interpretation that persocoms always had 'real' emotions. I also found it interesting how you gave Minako an important job in a position of authority, because I've been planning to do something similar at the end of CTT (of course, that's still a long way off).

The ending of the children's book was also very good, contrasting the rather depressing message/tone of Chitose's books in the original manga.

The wedding scene was great as well, albeit short.

I did notice a mistake though: you wrote that Zima and Dita wore nothing other than black, but then you said Zima had a red shirt. And their appearance in this chapter reminded me that they didn't have very big roles in the story overall, despite being introduced early on. Maybe in the expanded edition you can include more Zima/Dita scenes. Other than that though, this story is amazing and nearly perfect.

I greatly look forward to your further fanfics and other writing projects.

You should probably change 'transistors' to something else; those have been obsolete for quite a while now.

A lot of interesting revelations in this chapter and connections to PMYM, but I'm still somewhat confused about Garret's past identity.

A very exciting and climactic chapter.

My only two complaints were that the prose seemed a little purple at times (although it was otherwise excellently written), and I'm still not a big fan of the idea that persocoms lacked the capability to have the same emotions and will as humans without it being given to them by some outside influence, instead of realizing it themselves. But of course this is your continuity so you can interpret it any way you want.

It seems the story is finally coming to an end... hard to believe since it's been so long.

I can see more of the Madoka connections in this chapter.

I thought you said you would be updating this one chapter at a time now? These huge updates are making it hard for me to keep up (not that I don't appreciate them, of course).

So is Angel working with Kyubey, or another incubator? That's a surprising twist; I wonder what their goal is in all of this.

I also don't get why Angel made that public announcement if she was just addressing Amber. At first I thought it might have been to cause a bunch of people to show up at the location of the fight due to curiosity, so she would have an advantage (heroes have to hold back to avoid harming innocents, but villains don't ). But if there was such an easy way to clear out the area, Angel would have known that too.

Are you implying that Chi is the reincarnation of Madoka? That's an interesting idea.

I really like the way you've been writing Junji and Minako, although for the first time you had them do something I consider out of character. Minako would have never accepted being relegated to the sidelines and would have insisted on joining the fight, and Junji would back her up. Of course I understand that you want a showdown featuring the story's main protagonists without unnecessary distractions, so I see why you wrote it that way.

BTW, going by my supervillain mindset (yes, I have such a thing), I would have sent illusions/duplicates/stand-ins to the fight instead of showing up personally, and then nuked the whole area with an orbital death ray or something once Amber and her group showed up. Villains don't need to fight fair, after all.

The scene between Mami and Yuzuki that you mentioned sounds interesting... I hope you revisit that idea sometime. Seeing a persocom who looks like her dead daughter and has a very close bond with her son would probably make for some good character drama.

The fight scenes were also incredibly well-written and exciting. I'll review the rest of these new chapters when I have the time. BTW, I'll also get back to reading Rolitania and keep e-mailing you my thoughts on it, if you want.

Nice to see another update. I'd just like to mention that the name of the artist the song you mentioned was by didn't show up, probably because the site software deletes anything with a period in the middle so people don't post links.

Also, I doubt Chi would be quite that naive when it came to sexual matters... especially considering all the porn Hideki watches.

There were so many references here to my story and characters that I was almost overwhelmed. I'd really like to thank you for that (I'm currently a short way in to writing the draft of my next chapter, and reading how well-written your scenes were compared to the clumsy-sounding prose and dialogue I have so far made me feel a bit inferior - you're writing my own characters better than I am! I'm going to have to step up my game if I want to be able to compete!)

The scenes with Yuzuki were also pretty cute. I also liked how you described Minako and Kotoko's dresses (I might even use the former in my story).

I also think you described Momoko well.

As for the food idea, I'm a bit confused as I don't see how holograms could have the texture or weight behind them that physical food does.

Also, you wrote "Yuki" instead of "Yumi", but that's easily fixed.

When you write about the "racist, sexist kidnapper", I thought you were referring to Fumio from CTT, but then I remembered your AN that said that a character's speech would be referencing a real person, so I'm not sure who it could be.

Anyway, keep up the great work, I'll try my best to get my next chapter out soon as well.

(A mistake of mine: Chii wasn't go to school together Hideki! He was go to school alone. But I'm still with another fic, "Chobits Continues"... Excuse me.)
Nevertheless, the first contact between Hideki and the American duo, Garrett and Amber (with a providential little push of Ms. Shimizu, in the face of their sudden popularity in classroom), was very interesting. Amber trying to impersonate a persocom, while her "master" Garrett (posing as a human) was smirking at her struggle, was very funny. By the way, Garrett reminds me a little of another male persocom with a sense of humor, Ataru, O.C. from "Chobits Continues", which has a human girlfriend. I suppose that Amber and Garrett chose role reversal because (in Chobits universe) a duo of male human and female persocom is more common than the reverse of it (male chauvinism?).
I'm anxious to read the next chapters - and to know what the former Elda and her "parents" have (or had) to do with Garrett and Amber's family.

Now you've got me curious about this 'strange creature' that gave Angel her artifact. Perhaps this is the true final villain?

Chi and Hideki as parents are also incredibly cute.

You also write romance scenes incredibly well, I'm jealous. I think you have a better handle on writing intimate scenes than I do, so don't feel bad about that.

Another excellent chapter. Sumomo and Chi were so cute the way you described them.

Also, it's only a minor nitpick, but lightning doesn't travel at the speed of light (besides, if it did, she could never see it coming anyway)

Aww, Kotoko lost... good thing it was just practice, though.

Since both Minoru and Amber had to fulfill their bets, doesn't that mean that Minoru would have to reveal why Yuzuki was acting oddly?