Awwwww... so sweet

Nice alliteration. "desolate, dank, dark dungeon"

It didn't have as much cliche Amian things as most of these kind of stories do, so that was good.

The part I liked most was that the dialogue wasn't those one-liners. Also, there seemed to be very little narration, mostly dialogue, which was interesting.

Sort of cliche, yet if Ian ever confessed, it would probably take a situation like that. And not cliche at all was him giving her advice on Dan's changing personality; I liked that. :)

~Lily

Awww! That was so cute! I've never really seen that kind of writing before, in that kind of tense, but it's really cool! I love how Amy's just ranting about her life and all the things she'll never get to do and Ian's just like, "Amy." "Amy." Amy!"

Overall, AWESOME job!

~Dani